My little story seems to run right along the divide

[mikey2much]

My little non-erotica story seems to be getting comments from both sides of the divide that exist in America today.

I like the ideal that it provokes a response, but I do wish it had more readers.
I guess non-erotica on an erotic story site is like trying to sell apples at a seafood shop. It ain't what they have come to find.

I enjoyed the feedback so I thought that you might also. The story is 'A life Well Lived' and there is a link on my sig below.
I hope to be hearing from you soon. ;-)
mikey




Interesting point of view for the story
04/25/07 By: Alvaron53
Excellent writing of a possible future past. Nicely paced and interestingly told.
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The previous poster said, "<I>we could always lose this war.</I> What do you mean <B>could</B>? We lost this war some time ago.
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One thing is certain: we have given the Iraqis a precious gift, one that few people in the world enjoy, a gift that will keep on giving for some time to come. Depleted uranium poisoning. What a wonderful idea! All the splendid effects of nuclear weapons without all the mess, noise and chaos.

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A possible fate but not for sure
04/25/07 By: allforall
Seems more like a an essay than a story but gripping all the same. To those who might otherwise complain, we could always lose this war. We are after all fighting primitive religious types who only have their god to live and ie for.

so far none of the public promises have come true.

I pray this isn't a prophesy

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A Big Zero!
04/24/07 By: Anonymous in Southeastern United States
Not only does your story rate a zero, but so does your politics. If you want to rant and rave, then set up a radical web site. Including your demented politics in your story allows the reader to critize both.

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A Life Well Lived
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[cloudy]

You might be surprised, Mikey. I have one non-erotic story, and it has the most comments of any of mine (42), and one of the highest scores.

 

[Many Feathers]

Ditto...

You might be surprised, Mikey. I have one non-erotic story, and it has the most comments of any of mine (42), and one of the highest scores.

Same here Cloudy!

And yeah...I'm writing again and reposting my old Sandman stories too.

 

[cloudy]

Same here Cloudy!

And yeah...I'm writing again and reposting my old Sandman stories too.

Good for you, wiishkobi niijikiwenh. I know that Sandman still has fans that look for him.

 

[Many Feathers]

Lol

Good for you, wiishkobi niijikiwenh. I know that Sandman still has fans that look for him.

Thank you Neheewa Netaa' I'll show you mine if you show me yours

And love the AV Cloudy.

 

[cloudy]

Thank you Neheewa Netaa' I'll show you mine if you show me yours

And love the AV Cloudy.

How decadently tempting that is, giinawaa miikawaadad miigaazowinini.

(chi-miigwech...it suits me, I think)

 

[Many Feathers]

Lmao....

How decadently tempting that is, giinawaa miikawaadad miigaazowinini.

(chi-miigwech...it suits me, I think)

Anytime ya wanna Nata'sha Oyanada (Can't send by smoke signals...but could by email.) LOL

 

[cloudy]

Anytime ya wanna Nata'sha Oyanada (Can't send by smoke signals...but could by email.) LOL

LOL...we could just confuse the shit outta someone so easily, heya?

(did you see my title? )

 

[Many Feathers]

LOL...we could just confuse the shit outta someone so easily, heya?

(did you see my title? )

Hell, you and I could confuse the shit out of one another.

LOL...just did. Thats a good one.

 

[cloudy]

Hell, you and I could confuse the shit out of one another.

LOL...just did. Thats a good one.

I could switch to Cherokee

 

[Many Feathers]

Oh sure...

I could switch to Cherokee

Make it even harder for me. I'm still a na'ta weeha.

 

[cloudy]

Make it even harder for me. I'm still a na'ta weeha.

Actually, Cherokee's a little easier, for me, than Ojibway, but the nasal sounds are tough for me to make - I just don't talk that way.

 

[Many Feathers]

Likewise...

Actually, Cherokee's a little easier, for me, than Ojibway, but the nasal sounds are tough for me to make - I just don't talk that way.

There's a few words that are tough for me to sound properly. Some with a click-like sound at the end, others with a semi "ack" like sound up front as though your trying to cough up a good one. Interesting language.

 

[cloudy]

There's a few words that are tough for me to sound properly. Some with a click-like sound at the end, others with a semi "ack" like sound up front as though your trying to cough up a good one. Interesting language.

Indeed. Choctaw has a lot of that, as well. Ojibway just has all those annoying double vowels.

Stella was writing a story and she needed Algonquin-based words, so told her I'd help....K's mom is still fluent, and so are bunches of others - but I couldn't find a way to ask my almost-mother-in-law how to say "Fuck me in the ass."

She'd have beat my ass.

 

[Many Feathers]

Lmao...

Indeed. Choctaw has a lot of that, as well. Ojibway just has all those annoying double vowels.

Stella was writing a story and she needed Algonquin-based words, so told her I'd help....K's mom is still fluent, and so are bunches of others - but I couldn't find a way to ask my almost-mother-in-law how to say "Fuck me in the ass."

She'd have beat my ass.

That's a word I STILL haven't found out how to say in Shoshoni.

BTW...still remember this one: Ayv gvgeyui nihi And I do too Cloudy...you've always been special to me.

 

[cloudy]

That's a word I STILL haven't found out how to say in Shoshoni.

BTW...still remember this one: Ayv gvgeyui nihi And I do too Cloudy...you've always been special to me.

Thank you, baby.

You know you're special to me, too.

 

[Many Feathers]

Ah shucks...

Thank you, baby.

You know you're special to me, too.

(LOL...just realized how badly we hijacked this thread...maybe we should get a room.)

 

[cloudy]

(LOL...just realized how badly we hijacked this thread...maybe we should get a room.)

works for me.

Sorry, mikey That's what happens when Injuns get together.

 

[Many Feathers]

He he...

works for me.

Sorry, mikey That's what happens when Injuns get together.

BTW...thanks again for the advise. Did what you told me, was an "interesting" experience to say the least. Didn't even say anything in the beginning...he just looked at me for the longest time, then said: "You need to let go," talk about an interesting start. Anyway...gave me a song to learn (short simple...thank god) and now it's waiting for the next three full moons...(time enough to learn it) then sing it on the third (in the meadow I'm thinking)...then the tough part. I have to take something that I've kept...and bury it...then walk away from it. After that...we'll see.

But have some other obsticles to face down the road here. Never does get easy does it?

 

[cloudy]

BTW...thanks again for the advise. Did what you told me, was an "interesting" experience to say the least. Didn't even say anything in the beginning...he just looked at me for the longest time, then said: "You need to let go," talk about an interesting start. Anyway...gave me a song to learn (short simple...thank god) and now it's waiting for the next three full moons...(time enough to learn it) then sing it on the third (in the meadow I'm thinking)...then the tough part. I have to take something that I've kept...and bury it...then walk away from it. After that...we'll see.

But have some other obsticles to face down the road here. Never does get easy does it?

no, but the man you saw is wise, I think.

 

[Many Feathers]

Honey....

no, but the man you saw is wise, I think.

Wise doesn't even cover it. I mean I was nervous, but he already knew that. He laughed, offered me smoke...we smoked...then sat, for the longest time before he looked at me and said that. Felt the hairs on the back of my neck twist in braids...seriously.

Then we smoked some more, (Yeah...I brought tabac to give him). "Good smoke" he told me...so guess that was a good thing.

But yeah baby...wise beyond words.

 

[mikey2much]

Hijacked by windtalkers

The only thing that I could pick up for sure was that you guys smoked and then talked. Like Moses I use the burning bush when I get next to God'

I smoked tonight and I already feel wiser. Wish you ladies could've joined me.

take care,
mikey

 

[Patrick_B76]

Interesting story. Not my kind of thing, but well told.

Whats the deal with the Alabama checkpoints and seventy five prisons? Are there really seventy five prisons in the state of Alabama? Seems a little high to me.

Also, possession of under 2.2 lbs. is a misdemeanor (according to norml.org). I don't think they could take your car for that and I also wouldn't think one would do much if any prison time for a bag.

Also, if James actually saw her pull it out, wouldn't you think he would recognize the difference between marijuana and tobacco? They don't really look alike.

Why exactly was Bush impeached? Because of a bombing? The Democrats don't have enough votes in congress to successfully impeach, iirc. I also don't think that President Cheney would just flatten Iraq. I also think bombing "Iraq back into the Stone Age" is too cliched.

It seems that you created the Cheney bombings to give the world a casus beli to completely cut us off. It's pure fantasy, it is completely unbelievable. Cheney didn't get this far in his life by making rash decisions. I also doubt that military brass would follow through with an order from Cheney to flatten Iraq for no reason. I really don't believe that Cheney is so much of a religious zealot that he would bomb the entire country of Iraq for no reason.

If you are trying to make a point with the story, the only point that I could gain out of it is that you are extremely anti-Bush/Cheney. Probably to the point of fanaticism.

Then there is this:

"As he rode he wondered if Timothy McVeigh felt this sense of guilt for risking the innocence to get to the guilty."

WTF is that all about? What guilty people did Tim get? Tim didn't just risk the innocent, he slaughtered them. Also, shouldn't it be "innocent?"

I can't feel any sympathy for the lead character since he is determined to use terrorism, even if it meant taking out innocent people. In my opinion, just the allusion that he is willing to take out the innocent to get after his target negates any sympathy I gave him at the death of his daughter and his son in Iraq.

These are just my opinions. But I don't find your hypothetical construction of America after these events to be at all realistic. It would have been better had you set it fifty or sixty years into the future with made up characters and made up events. Too much Iraq, Bush and Cheney is just too controversial for me.

Also, I noticed in the story one time you used "alone" when I think you meant "along" and another you used "angle" when I think you mean "Angel."

As I said earlier, well written story, probably could have been longer. Would certainly be more enjoyable without all the current events and the McVeigh comment. I hope you take this as constructive. These are my honest opinions.

 

[mikey2much]

Thanks for the input Patrickb76

I think that you are right about the difference between pot and tobacco, I was a little worried about that myself but I wanted to show that the two of them had to meet in the middle to form a relationship.

I live in Fla and I swear that there is a major prison in every county.

Anything over an oz. is a felonly, and they will take your car over seeds found in the carpet.

Think about Cheney for a minute, this is the man who even after everybody was outraged about us using waterboarding in questioning would not ever back down. He still thinks that it is OK. He scares the shit out of me, to the point that I hope nothing happens to the president, even though I think he is the worst thing to happen to our country since the white house was burned in 1812.

Remember when Colin Powell went to the U. N. and presented all that false
information about WMD's. He had no choice but to do his duty. He didn't think it was right but he had a job to do and he did it. There have been several generals who have spoken out against the president and Dick Cheney after they retired. (they are not allowed to speak against him while they are still serving) Bottow line is that the armed forces do what they are told by washington.

I guess that there is a very small difference between innocent bystanders and collarial damage. It depends on who you are talking to at the time as to which it is.

There are so many reasons why George Bush should be impeached that I couldn't narrow it down to one reason. But there is a strong sentiment in the country to impeach bush. The state house of Maine recently passed a resolution calling for his impeachment. I know as well as they do that it won't happen. They are afraid that Cheney would slide into the drivers seat and then there would be hell to pay.

McViegh is a different story, I got burned pretty bad here by bringing him up in a thread a while back. The only thing that I will say in his defense is that he got the office that had sent out the guys who murdered those 86 men women and children in Waco. I think that the bombing in Ok city was a reaction to waco. There are a lot of strong feelings about that here so I will go no further now about Tim McViegh.

My man in the story was kind of putting himself into McViegh's mind for a moment, maybe because he was wondering if people would think of him as a big a villian as McViegh. He didn't want to repeat the same mistake of killing innocents to get the guilty. This is something that would never worry Cheney.

I guess what I wanted to say was that anybody can be driven to become a terrorist if he is pushed hard enough. Once you reach the point where you have nothing to lose you become a very dangerous man.

One person sent me an email telling me that I should have let the scene shift at the end so that it was happening in Iraq.
I think that would have worked very well but I didn't know how to pull it off.

Thanks for your insights and comments, sorry about the spelling errors, I spell checked but they slipped through. I need to find a proof reader.
mikey

 

[Patrick_B76]

I live in Fla and I swear that there is a major prison in every county.

According to this list there are thirteen "correctional institutes' in Alabama. I'm not counting work centers, release centers and honor camps.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_Alabama_state_prisons

Something to keep in mind is that Florida has a lot more people than Alabama, therefor more crime, more criminals and more prisons.

Anything over an oz. is a felonly, and they will take your car over seeds found in the carpet.

I live in Florida to and this is the first time I have ever heard of them confiscating your vehicle for seeds.

Think about Cheney for a minute, this is the man who even after everybody was outraged about us using waterboarding in questioning would not ever back down. He still thinks that it is OK. He scares the shit out of me, to the point that I hope nothing happens to the president, even though I think he is the worst thing to happen to our country since the white house was burned in 1812.

Remember when Colin Powell went to the U. N. and presented all that false
information about WMD's. He had no choice but to do his duty. He didn't think it was right but he had a job to do and he did it. There have been several generals who have spoken out against the president and Dick Cheney after they retired. (they are not allowed to speak against him while they are still serving) Bottow line is that the armed forces do what they are told by washington.

Big difference between what you state here and a wholesale carpet bombing of Iraqi cities. People in the military are bound to uphold the constitution of the United States. They do not have to follow orders which they feel may be illegal.

There are so many reasons why George Bush should be impeached that I couldn't narrow it down to one reason. But there is a strong sentiment in the country to impeach bush. The state house of Maine recently passed a resolution calling for his impeachment. I know as well as they do that it won't happen. They are afraid that Cheney would slide into the drivers seat and then there would be hell to pay.

The Maine HoR has 88 Dems and 60 Republicans. Doesn't surprise me that would pass.

For the President to be impeached, they would first need a simple majority in the House, which they have, but then they would have an impeachment trial in the Senate. To convict the President they would need 2/3 of the Senate to vote for impeachment. There are 49 Dems and 49 Republicans, two independents. The Vice President would break any tie. I seriously doubt enough Republicans would vote to impeach one of their own for the reasons you give in your story.

I don't doubt the left wing and the democrats want Bush impeached. The point is that they can't do it. They don't have the political firepower to do it. And in the context of your story, what is the point of impeaching him when he will be out of office in just a matter of months anyways?

McViegh is a different story, I got burned pretty bad here by bringing him up in a thread a while back. The only thing that I will say in his defense is that he got the office that had sent out the guys who murdered those 86 men women and children in Waco. I think that the bombing in Ok city was a reaction to waco. There are a lot of strong feelings about that here so I will go no further now about Tim McViegh.

As badly as the Feds fucked up Waco, David Koresh was responsible for the deaths of all those people in that compound.

The OKC bombing was certainly in response to Waco and also Ruby Ridge, but it doesn't mitigate McVeigh's actions in the least. He was a cold blooded terrorist murderer.

My man in the story was kind of putting himself into McViegh's mind for a moment, maybe because he was wondering if people would think of him as a big a villian as McViegh. He didn't want to repeat the same mistake of killing innocents to get the guilty. This is something that would never worry Cheney.

Boom! There you go again. You don't know Dick Cheney, how do you know how he feels?

I guess what I wanted to say was that anybody can be driven to become a terrorist if he is pushed hard enough. Once you reach the point where you have nothing to lose you become a very dangerous man.

Sounds like a justification for terrorism to me. There is none.

Thanks for your insights and comments, sorry about the spelling errors, I spell checked but they slipped through. I need to find a proof reader.
mikey

No need to apologize. Just letting you know what I picked up as I was reading it.