My first ...

[LordMagicMan]

Publication here on lit. Please read and vote so I know what you all think.


http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=12201

Thanks in advace.

*hug*

LMM

 

[Mistress]

Bounces!

YAY! LMM! [/i]Snuggles[/i]

 

[Isolde]

Congrats LMM. *hugs ya tight

 

[LordMagicMan]

Anyone like it besides my friends?? Please read it and give me some advice. Thanks Especially if you dont like it.

 

[Make_My_Day]

Hi Lord (love your cartoon guy by the way.. and congratulations from me as well)

Ok, I read it, the first story I've read so far on Lit, so don't take my advice too seriously. (Makes it a first for both of us then..)

First of all.. I DID love it. It's sweet... gentle yet passionate.

One (stupid) little remark; one sentence is written twice (just to show I've actually read it AND paid attention too )
And a personal preference; the actual deed.. I would take a bit more time for that. It's no problem since it's under "romance" but I would have loved to see that last a little longer.

Keep at it; show us some more of that magic!
Hope I could have been of some use to you..