My first story!

[Time2Play]

I just posted my first story and I'd love to get some critical feedback There's a followup to it, but I'm not sure if I'll write it if there's no interest.

Thanks for your time

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=25163

 

[tigerjen]

definitely needs a Ch. 2!

Hi!

You finished with a chapter 1.....now you need
the chapter 2.........good tale so far......!

Tigerjen

PS.....if you'd like to check out my writing when you
get a chance, here is my link for viewing pleasure:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=39113


Good luck in your writing!