My first story

[Pokerman]

After years of reading other people's work on the 'net, and doing some editing for someone here at lit, I was encouraged to post some of my own work.

The result, "After the Concert" was just added to the Erotic Couplings section. It's based on a true story.

Any comments or suggestions are much appreciated.

Thanks.

(It should be easy to find in the New section, but if not, my page is at http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=39236)

 

[Guest]

Not a bad first story. It was an enjoyable read primarily because It brought back a few "old" memories of my own.

You stated that you've done some editing on literotica? You had
a few <minor> errors, but certainly not enough to distract the reader.

Someone "helped" me considerably by suggesting I re-read each page after completing it before moving on. Doing that, I not only
caught "most" of my typing errors, I also began to see sentences that where either too long or not necessary.

All in all.....not a bad story, especially if it "was" true, it tends to add an additional spice to the mix.

Oh...one more suggestion? More description, i.e. down to color of clothing even in some instances. Although the mind will dress a character so we can see them, sometimes it helps to speed things along if you give a little more attention to details of character's being described.

Thanks for the read though.......

Thesandman

 

[Pokerman]

Thanks for the feedback, Thesandman4u.

I'll try to incorporate some of that as I continue to write.

 

[joe_author]

I enjoyed the story overall, a few parts were not of my liking but that can be said for any story. Currently I have four stories I am working on that will be posted soon.

Keep up the good work as an author can only get better with more practice.

Call me joe, joe_author!