My First Story....Want your thoughts

[Wicked-N-Erotic]

Here's my first story. Tell me your thoughts good or bad.
Thanks
Wicked



Pleasures of the Flesh
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=56757

 

[AriaSilverfyre]

You write very well. I don't normally read from that category, but I really enjoyed it. I can't say anything that needs to be changed. All the vital things, in my opinion, were there. Description, emotion, and a touch of dialogue.

Keep up the good work.

 

[Wicked-N-Erotic]

Thanks so much Aria

Thank you Aria for your comments.
I read your vamp story and loved it.
I am a real big fan of vampyre stories, I have been working on one for a couple years now. Someday I'll get it finished LOL. It's pretty long but if you want I can give you a link to read what I have done.
Again thanks for your thoughts on this one.
Wicked

 

[openassguy]

I really enjoyed that, especially for a first piece. Is it based on real life exerience?

 

[Starlight13]

Loved the story, nice detail and feeling, and hope you go onto write more of them. Female viewpoint stories are the ones I like - a FFM threesome would be nice! Personal preference, I know. Being of the opposite sex, a large part of the attraction is reading about what is going on in the female mind... which is probably the attraction to the female viewpoint. Good work, more please!

 

[Wicked-N-Erotic]

Openassguy,
Thanks for your input. It is partially based on true life and part fantasy. The basic idea of the story happened just not quite exactly as I wrote it. Glad you liked it.



Starlight13,
Your thoughts are also appreciated. I'm working on fine-tuning my FMF story for posting, thanks to the positive response from this one. Like this one, it is also a true experience with a bit of fantasy thrown in. All my stories so far are from the female viewpoint, I guess I really don't know the male mind well enough to write one from that angle. The male mind is far to complicated for me to get into, LOL.

Again thank you both for your opinions.

Wicked

 

[hogjack]

Nice threesome story

Good stuff. The sex was hot and real. Maybe build up some tension and reluctance?

 

[Guest]

My pleasure - and as for the bit about not understanding the male mind... I am sure you can figure it out - just keep it VERY SIMPLE!

 

[ANiceGuy]

Ummm... I wonder

I wonder what is in store for our wicked and erotic adventuress??