My first story please let me know what you think.

[beergoggles]

Please be kind this is my fist attempt at writting one of the stories I so love.

 

[Divine Deception]

Would kind of help if you posted a link to the story hun.

 

[beergoggles]

Oops

Sorry about that new to this.......

 

[kbate]

I do not wish to discourage you but this story is desperately in need of an editor, a spell checker and a grammar bitch.

If you wish PM and I will attempt to help.

I did like the basic story but it has so many grammar and punctuation problems It is difficult to rate it in its current form.

 

[beergoggles]

help....

Kbate was nice enough to give it to me like it is. Ifailed her english class.... LOL.... I was thankful for her help she offered to revise it for me. So beware of all the spelling and grammar mistakes. I hope that you wll not judge me on this things....