My First Story...Any Feedback?

[Beaker]

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=37608

I had to try.

 

[Weird Harold]

[BI had to try. [/B]

Well crafted and with an interesting twist. Dr. Honeydew would be proud of you.

 

[Beaker]

Dr Bunsen...

That explains the stainless steel, but it wasnt in a laboratory... what WOULD he think?

Ravenloft, you feltophile leave me out.