My first Non erotic poem

[Sissy Adele Howells]

Hi,
Up to now only written erotic poetry. This is my first non-erotic one. Was written very quickly. Hope you like it and would love some feedback.
SISSY ADELE

http://english.literotica.com:81/stories/showstory.php?id=245457

 

[vampiredust]

I enjoyed reading your poem but think about cutting or changing the second line, 'light at end of tunnel' sounds cliched.