my first ever story....

[anneski]

Hi there, I have had approved my first ever erotic story - first story full stop, in fact, and was just wondering what, if anything, people think of it? I enjoyed writing it, which I guess is the main thing, but I'd appreciate having any comments, criticisms or advice that you may have time to offer?

The link is Discipline in the classroom

The story is called "Discipline in the classroom" and is basically about a teacher punishing a student for her cheekiness during revision. Only, this punishment is more severe than writing lines.. and more enjoyable in the end..

Any comments welcomed, either here or by e-mail to me, addy below, ta muchly
anneski

 

[armyjim_2000]

Pretty good!

I enjoyed it quite a bit! Is it true? As it was written, it sounds as if it is a true story.
Excellent job on your first story!

 

[anneski]

Re: Pretty good!

I enjoyed it quite a bit! Is it true? As it was written, it sounds as if it is a true story.
Excellent job on your first story!

I'm glad you enjoyed it

It isn't true, sadly, although I wish it were! But it is based on an extremely vivid dream I had recently, after some rather flirtatious pm's with a friend that I made on another list.
And it certainly all felt real in that dream.. <sigh>

Thanks for your kind comments

 

[Ventoso]

Very nice history, Anneski!

I look forward to reading more histories coming from your ... dreams!

 

[anneski]

Very nice history, Anneski!
I look forward to reading more histories coming from your ... dreams!

Thanks very much Ventoso I do have some strange dreams <G>

I have just submitted my 2nd story, which is a little different, shall we say, for consideration. It is called "The Borrowing", and I hope it isn't too weird for you!
It is written in 2 parts, both detailing the same incident, but from both party's perspectives.

 

[Ventoso]

I am waiting to read your new story after being published on Lit!