My first audio story, feedback and advice for future

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hey, i made this story without writing it first, and it was all a flow of conciousness (frmo my head and elsewhere ) mainly because i absolutely love phone sex, and the thought of my voice arousing other females is incredibly appealing

heres the link
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=290809

i've gotten some positive feedback, so i would love to do more of these in future.
any thoughts?

 

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ive uploaded some more onto the site now and they seem to be getting a good response

id still like to hear from some members of the board let me know what you think