My erotic short story about a nymphomaniac school teacher is out now

[zaynab_riyab]

Hi guys,

Glad to be here. Just wanted to let you all know that I've just published
my first story. It's about a nymphomaniac school teacher who has been lusting after the father of one of her students. Would love it if you could read it and let me know what you guys think about it.

Here's the story:

https://www.literotica.com/s/stormy-night-23

 

[lovecraft68]

It was a fun little piece, and I have to admit I admire people who can slap together a nice little one page quick romp. My muse has this unnerving habit of taking a premise as simple as yours and making it into 4 lit pages or longer.

One thing I'd suggest is watch the size of your paragraphs, lits formatting is odd sometimes and you need to put a couple spaces between every few sentences or you end up with large blocks of text like you have in some spots, hard to read, especially on a phone which a lot of people read on these days.

Other than that, my only speedbump was some of your word choices, but that's a matter of style and preference

In general a good first effort.

 

[LaRascasse]

Hi guys,

Glad to be here. Just wanted to let you all know that I've just published
my first story. It's about a nymphomaniac school teacher who has been lusting after the father of one of her students. Would love it if you could read it and let me know what you guys think about it.

Here's the story:

https://www.literotica.com/s/stormy-night-23

Not bad. Short, sweet and hits the right spot. I'd like to see more chapters on the main characters. Good job

 

[zaynab_riyab]

It was a fun little piece, and I have to admit I admire people who can slap together a nice little one page quick romp. My muse has this unnerving habit of taking a premise as simple as yours and making it into 4 lit pages or longer.

One thing I'd suggest is watch the size of your paragraphs, lits formatting is odd sometimes and you need to put a couple spaces between every few sentences or you end up with large blocks of text like you have in some spots, hard to read, especially on a phone which a lot of people read on these days.

Other than that, my only speedbump was some of your word choices, but that's a matter of style and preference

In general a good first effort.

Thank you for the feedback. Will keep your suggestions in mind.

 

[zaynab_riyab]

Not bad. Short, sweet and hits the right spot. I'd like to see more chapters on the main characters. Good job

Thank you. I'm not sure if I'll write more about the male character. But I certainly have plans to write more about Anita playing the field.

 

[MohanSingh]

A good first effort. Develop your characters some more. Let the reader get invested.

 

[SexualisPhantasia]

Really good. I love your word choice and your detailed descriptions of the teacher. I hope you continue to write erotica, you seem like a natural.

 

[Cobaltofdark]

It was a fun little piece, and I have to admit I admire people who can slap together a nice little one page quick romp. My muse has this unnerving habit of taking a premise as simple as yours and making it into 4 lit pages or longer.

One thing I'd suggest is watch the size of your paragraphs, lits formatting is odd sometimes and you need to put a couple spaces between every few sentences or you end up with large blocks of text like you have in some spots, hard to read, especially on a phone which a lot of people read on these days.

Other than that, my only speedbump was some of your word choices, but that's a matter of style and preference

In general a good first effort.

Guilt as charged