My 2nd submission

yellowrose7

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Just a note to say thank you to all who had commented/voted either publically or privately on my 2nd submission "A Sweet Seduction". I hope to add another story soon.


Yellow Rose




A Sweet Seduction
 
That was quite well done. The "you" comes over as rather anonymous, not well defined, but I think people who are going to like the story are going to identify with him. Opinions are mixed on second person. I don't really see it as a problem. We all identify partly with the positions of people in the stories, whatever they're doing: why not accept what the author says "you" did? It was sexy and well described.
 
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