Movie Night

[sirhugs]

I did a movie night story. To be honest, it was just a stroke story that came to me, and I wrote it in a single afternoon. It's an already established incestuous story, which wasn't terribly well received, but I enjoyed writing it nonetheless:

https://www.literotica.com/s/movie-night-63

not sure what you mean by "already established incestuous story"- the fact it wasn't their first time?

Are you saying you think the idea is worth more stories or not?

FWIW i liked your story- well written, good use of dialogue, just kind of short and I thought it could have made more use of the "jeopardy" aspect of the risk of detection. Otherwise why include the friend and wife/bother at all- once the action starts, they vanish. I was expecting discovery, or adding playmates, or at least a dash to cover up.

 

[Soshameless11]

not sure what you mean by "already established incestuous story"- the fact it wasn't their first time?

Are you saying you think the idea is worth more stories or not?

FWIW i liked your story- well written, good use of dialogue, just kind of short and I thought it could have made more use of the "jeopardy" aspect of the risk of detection. Otherwise why include the friend and wife/bother at all- once the action starts, they vanish. I was expecting discovery, or adding playmates, or at least a dash to cover up.

Yeah, that this wasn't their first time - that they'd been fucking for a while before she left for college. The wife and friends were just there to add more risk of being caught. If I continued the story, maybe one of the friends sees and wants in on the action, but what turns me on most is the sneaking around aspect, the keeping secrets, so who knows. Thanks for your kind words.

 

[sirhugs]

Yeah, that this wasn't their first time - that they'd been fucking for a while before she left for college. The wife and friends were just there to add more risk of being caught. If I continued the story, maybe one of the friends sees and wants in on the action, but what turns me on most is the sneaking around aspect, the keeping secrets, so who knows. Thanks for your kind words.

unfortunately, I didn't think the "risk of getting caught" came through strongly enough. Just my opinion.

 

[JJA122]

I read it.
It gave me a few ideas, mayhap the movie is so scary that she clutches onto him.
And... opportune 'gasping' and 'trembling' at scary movie.