Mother-in-Law's Desire

[R M Roxinger]

The story with this title is one of my favorite stories at this whole site. I wrote so to its author, Ebdon, but his e-mail address is no longer in service, so I thought I'd share my thoughts here. I love how the male character gets seduced by his mother-in-law. It's too bad they don't get totally naked; otherwise he could view & suck on her breasts during the intercourse. But I really get turned on when he impregnates her. I never tire of reading that story.

 

[WickedEve]

This is very short story. Maybe a 4th of a page? Less?

Just when it starts, it stops:

When she removed my underwear, she released my hard cock into the open. She took one look, stood up, and sat down on it, slamming her body onto it's length.

As I caressed her breasts through her T-shirt, she gyrated and continually slammed her body on my cock. I could feel the wave of emotion building up inside of me. Before I knew it, I was ready to explode.

She smiled at me, once more, and made a huge effort to make me cum. Without appreciating what we were doing, I planted the seed that made my sister- in - law.

The End. That's it. What's above is about 1/4 of the entire story. The reader doesn't have time to become involved. I was looking for the second page. I couldn't believe that was the end.

This story needs to be seriously fleshed out. This is my opinion. But, I do respect your right to love the story.

 

[R M Roxinger]

Thank you for your opinion & respect. I would have loved for the characters to engage in a little more foreplay myself, such as undressing completely & kissing & licking each other's entire bodies. Nevertheless, the story never fails to turn me on. Too bad the author of that story is no longer here to see this feedback.

 

[R M Roxinger]

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