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[Cruel2BKind]

I've been trying to write a threesome for a while. However, I have two major problems.

The first problem, I don't think anyone can help me with. I've been trying to create a situation where a threesome happens, but at the same time I have a really hard time writing casual sex, and I'm trying to write sexual situations that are meaningful and don't hurt anyone. So jealous threesomes are out.

The second problem, I have such a hard time keeping the characters straight. (keeping track of them, not their sexual orientation). Since I write GM, an extra shade of difficulty is added on because there is no differentiation in gender so all three of them will be 'he'.

Does anyone have some tips on writing a threesome so the diction doesn't get clunky?

 

[Darkniciad]

Give them all different hair colors right out of the gate. That gives you an alternate descriptor you can take advantage of when relating the action.

 

[FatBttmGrl]

Also try to be very cognizant of the way each character speaks. For instance have one with very proper grammar, one who uses slang, one who uses nicknames. These are just examples feel free to substitute your own idiosyncrasies for each character.

Or you can have physical characteristics of each character (beyond hair) that separate them. Rough hands from a carpenter, smooth hands from a masseuse, hairy arms, etc...


They seem like a small things but subconsciously a reader will pick up the nuance of a character's speech pattern and/or description and will be able to discern the characters from subtle things like that.

Does that make sense?

 

[lovecraft68]

I've been trying to write a threesome for a while. However, I have two major problems.

The first problem, I don't think anyone can help me with. I've been trying to create a situation where a threesome happens, but at the same time I have a really hard time writing casual sex, and I'm trying to write sexual situations that are meaningful and don't hurt anyone. So jealous threesomes are out.

The second problem, I have such a hard time keeping the characters straight. (keeping track of them, not their sexual orientation). Since I write GM, an extra shade of difficulty is added on because there is no differentiation in gender so all three of them will be 'he'.

Does anyone have some tips on writing a threesome so the diction doesn't get clunky?

Even though you're supposed to stay away from constantly saying a name and should use He in place of it, if its a same sex 3-some you're going to have to keep using the names.

I went through this in a fffm scene in a story, I could use he/his for the guy, but I had to keep referring to the women by name.

 

[Dual_Triode]

I second the notion of unique physical qualities that can help identify the participants. Unique speech patterns are especially helpful. Maybe tattoos or other ornamentation can be used.

I think another tactic is to structure the activity with two main participants at a time. The "third man out" can be an observer or a helper, but the focus is with just two at a time. The pairings will shift as the scene plays out, of course.

The role each person plays in the scene, i.e. dom or sub, can also help distinguish individuals and add tension.

Disclaimer: I have precious little RL experience with 3-way situations.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

Too weird.

 

[MaxSebastian]

On the jealousy issue, you may find it helps to have a lot of communication between the three characters as they take each little step towards a full threesome.

Have them talk out the feelings they are having, and make sure the others are happy with the way things are going before they take the next step.

I'm trying out some group stories, and the talking about it all actually seems to help build the suspense too. Are they really going to do this crazy thing? Each time they talk or even think about the possibilities takes the heat up a little, until when it actually comes time to act, it's a real explosion.

 

[Cruel2BKind]

Thanks guys!

I'll think about it, and give a report on how well it's received.

 

[Boxlicker101]

It helps sometimes to give the characters more than one name. I don't mean John and Frank, but maybe Richard and Rick or Ken and Kenny, so you don't keep repeating the same names. Physical characteristics are good too, saying something like "The tall brunette thrust forward, burying his cock deeper in the shorter man's ass."

 

[sunandshadow]

Lots of good advice here. As far as avoiding casual sex and jealousy, you might try a situation where threesomes are normal. For example, some kind of military where fighters are assigned to permanent trios. Or more peacefully, perhaps in the future space ships usually have 3 person crews and it would be harsh if two of them were lovers and excluded the other one on those long lonely flights. Or perhaps there is a fantasy land where there are three elements of magic, such as earth, fire, and water, and mages are assigned in groups of three because complex spells require a caster of each element.

 

[Stella_Omega]

Sometimes if you start by writing the sex scene, your mind will fill in the back story for you-- how they got there. Then you can write the beginning.

 

[Bramblethorn]

The first problem, I don't think anyone can help me with. I've been trying to create a situation where a threesome happens, but at the same time I have a really hard time writing casual sex, and I'm trying to write sexual situations that are meaningful and don't hurt anyone. So jealous threesomes are out.

That doesn't have to be a problem. Threesomes can happen between friends, depending on the people involved. (The ones that don't turn into a horrible fiery mess tend to involve a lot of talking and boundary-setting.)

 

[Stella_Omega]

That doesn't have to be a problem. Threesomes can happen between friends, depending on the people involved. (The ones that don't turn into a horrible fiery mess tend to involve a lot of talking and boundary-setting.)

or one person being a super-easy-going, facilitative, reassuring type that really wants it to happen.

 

[PayDay]

I've been trying to write a threesome for a while.

Does anyone have some tips on writing a threesome so the diction doesn't get clunky?

Plot ideas and jealousy aside, don't make it a competition.

View the situation from one point of view looking at each side of a coin. This way you always know who is heads and who is tails, and who is flipping the coin - or which side of the coin is up.

2 of the group of 3 have to be the same sex (unless you are going all out, or something, I don't know), so make the coin the same gender.

Oh, and try and keep 'he went there and she went there when she went there' from being in the same sentence, unlesss you are trying to explain everything at once.

Two of the character's actions should be separated from the third. So if there are two guys and one girl, make the first guy, and the woman in one sentence, then the woman and the other guy in the next.

It is essentially 'back and forth' in simple terms, with the odd-character-out always moving in the background.

 

[Karenas]

"So jealous threesomes are out."

What if two of the guys are together and the third guy is bi, and in a relationship with a girl? He joins the other two, I guess, as a FWB.

 

[Stella_Omega]

As far as keeping the characters straight, get used to writing every name every time over and over. Feels funny, but by the second paragraph the reader should be so deep into the action that they won't care.

Please, don't use epithets!
"the blond" "the Lithuanian" "the hairy man"-- yeesh.

 

[Cruel2BKind]

As far as keeping the characters straight, get used to writing every name every time over and over. Feels funny, but by the second paragraph the reader should be so deep into the action that they won't care.

Please, don't use epithets!
"the blond" "the Lithuanian" "the hairy man"-- yeesh.

I agree.

I'm tossing around a short story. Nothing in depth... But there are genetically altered humans called 'Somatics' who are second-class citizens. They have animal characteristics, and many of them are in the streets.

My character picks up two of them, and takes care of them. I think I feel a threesome coming on.

Is it okay if I use epithets like 'The Kitten, or the pup?"

 

[Boxlicker101]

As far as keeping the characters straight, get used to writing every name every time over and over. Feels funny, but by the second paragraph the reader should be so deep into the action that they won't care.

Please, don't use epithets!
"the blond" "the Lithuanian" "the hairy man"-- yeesh.

I wouldn't call those epithets. Technically, they might be, but I think of an epithet as being an insulting descriptor, such as "The dumb blonde." I see nothing wrong with using neutral or complimentary words in distinguishing participants. It's certainly better than overusing pronouns or the names of the people. How about: "I buried my face in Mary's pussy and started to lick, while her roomate straddled the sexy blonde's face for the same kind of thrill."

 

[Stella_Omega]

I wouldn't call those epithets. Technically, they might be, but I think of an epithet as being an insulting descriptor, such as "The dumb blonde." I see nothing wrong with using neutral or complimentary words in distinguishing participants. It's certainly better than overusing pronouns or the names of the people. How about: "I buried my face in Mary's pussy and started to lick, while her roomate straddled the sexy blonde's face for the same kind of thrill."

Yes, you are thinking of "Derogatory epithets" as most of us do.

 

[Ironiclaconic]

Threesomes can be fun challenge as they open the door for a lot of conflict. Jealousy, insecurity, competition, etc. are fuel for the story.

Tony wants to try a threesome with Ann, but his girlfriend Jessica has always been jealous of Ann's body and is afraid Tony will prefer her friend. She is right to be afraid.

Don and Jim compete at everything and have a bet as to which one Janet will think was better after their session. Jim likes to cheat.

Alice is only participating in the threesome to enact a plan of revenge against her ex-boyfriend who invited her. Her ex is counting on it.

Once you know the conflict, the scene is a lot easier to write.

 

[Cruel2BKind]

Plot ideas and jealousy aside, don't make it a competition.

View the situation from one point of view looking at each side of a coin. This way you always know who is heads and who is tails, and who is flipping the coin - or which side of the coin is up.

2 of the group of 3 have to be the same sex (unless you are going all out, or something, I don't know), so make the coin the same gender.

Oh, and try and keep 'he went there and she went there when she went there' from being in the same sentence, unlesss you are trying to explain everything at once.

Two of the character's actions should be separated from the third. So if there are two guys and one girl, make the first guy, and the woman in one sentence, then the woman and the other guy in the next.

It is essentially 'back and forth' in simple terms, with the odd-character-out always moving in the background.

Threesomes can be fun challenge as they open the door for a lot of conflict. Jealousy, insecurity, competition, etc. are fuel for the story.

Tony wants to try a threesome with Ann, but his girlfriend Jessica has always been jealous of Ann's body and is afraid Tony will prefer her friend. She is right to be afraid.

Don and Jim compete at everything and have a bet as to which one Janet will think was better after their session. Jim likes to cheat.

Alice is only participating in the threesome to enact a plan of revenge against her ex-boyfriend who invited her. Her ex is counting on it.

Once you know the conflict, the scene is a lot easier to write.

Thanks for the advice both of you, but I DID make it clear that this is a dude's only threesome.

 

[Cruel2BKind]

Lots of good advice here. As far as avoiding casual sex and jealousy, you might try a situation where threesomes are normal. For example, some kind of military where fighters are assigned to permanent trios. Or more peacefully, perhaps in the future space ships usually have 3 person crews and it would be harsh if two of them were lovers and excluded the other one on those long lonely flights. Or perhaps there is a fantasy land where there are three elements of magic, such as earth, fire, and water, and mages are assigned in groups of three because complex spells require a caster of each element.

And I forgot to say it at the time, but I REALLY like this idea.

I'm thinking maybe a future where crews of prisoners get shipped to newly terraformed worlds to explore and mine resources. Maybe they only send dudes, or maybe the female section of the ship gets depressurized and kills them. After some tension, one guy offers to take care of the others!

Squee!

 

[Stella_Omega]

And I forgot to say it at the time, but I REALLY like this idea.

I'm thinking maybe a future where crews of prisoners get shipped to newly terraformed worlds to explore and mine resources. Maybe they only send dudes, or maybe the female section of the ship gets depressurized and kills them. After some tension, one guy offers to take care of the others!

Squee!

Wholesale fridging. Squee depletion. Come up with something less lethal to your primary demographic, thanks.

 

[Cruel2BKind]

Wholesale fridging. Squee depletion. Come up with something less lethal to your primary demographic, thanks.

I'm not saying squee for the murder of 6-12 females...

Chicks tend to get in the way, y'know?

Kidding kidding, sorry.

What if I only fridge half of them, so that the tension comes from only having six women and twelve guys?

 

[LettersFromTatyana]

Wholesale fridging.

This word really makes my day, and explains why I dislike such a significant chunk of action/adventure/sci-fi stuff.

Thanks, Stella!