mom/son;whose POV?

[sartana]

I am contemplating writing my very first erotic story and would like advice on 2 things before I get started.First,do you think I should have the son tell the story or the mother?Personally,I think it would be easier to go with the son since I am a male.
Secondly,I don't know if I should have the story take place"in the now"or have the son looking back on it now that he is much older.

 

[cloudy]

It's much easier to tell a story in past tense, but that can be anything from yesterday to 20 years ago.

One thing to be careful of, there are no stories allowed with characters under the age of 18 involved in anything remotely sexual - even if it's told when the character is now 80.

Tell it from whichever point of view makes you most comfortable. Third person would allow you to tell the story from all sides.

 

[Vincent E]

How about this as a challenge: alternate the POV between both mother and son. Do not tell the story just from a third person POV focusing on one character, but have alternating scenes where mother and then son, and then mother again and so forth, are giving their perspectives on what is happening.

 

[cloudy]

How about this as a challenge: alternate the POV between both mother and son. Do not tell the story just from a third person POV focusing on one character, but have alternating scenes where mother and then son, and then mother again and so forth, are giving their perspectives on what is happening.

That might be a little bit much to attempt on a first story.

 

[john_26_2001]

My favorite, and it doesn't seem to get done as much as the rest, is the Son's POV, where the mother seduces him slowly over time. Usually the one with the POV does the seducing. It would more personnal and "kinkier," if he's the one that gets seduced, so that he doesnt know whats coming next.

 

[sartana]

Yeah,the son will definitely be at least 18.I will probably go with having the son tell the story.I could have the mother tell it but I don't think that would be as hot.Just my opinion.I hope to get started on it with in a week as I am very anxious to hear what you all think of it.I have ideas for a few other stories,but one at a time.I will have to see if I can find my thesaurus.

 

[BlackSnake]

I am contemplating writing my very first erotic story and would like advice on 2 things before I get started.First,do you think I should have the son tell the story or the mother?Personally,I think it would be easier to go with the son since I am a male.
Secondly,I don't know if I should have the story take place"in the now"or have the son looking back on it now that he is much older.

If you tell the story in the third person, you can reveal what the mom and son are thinking and feeling.

 

[Silver_Star]

It's much easier to tell a story in past tense, but that can be anything from yesterday to 20 years ago.

One thing to be careful of, there are no stories allowed with characters under the age of 18 involved in anything remotely sexual - even if it's told when the character is now 80.

Tell it from whichever point of view makes you most comfortable. Third person would allow you to tell the story from all sides.

It's hard to believe that anyone would want to post a story with characters under age 18.

 

[Silver_Star]

My favorite, and it doesn't seem to get done as much as the rest, is the Son's POV, where the mother seduces him slowly over time. Usually the one with the POV does the seducing. It would more personnal and "kinkier," if he's the one that gets seduced, so that he doesnt know whats coming next.

Let's the reader have the thrill of anticipation, too!

 

[sartana]

I started writing it this morning so maybe by Wednesday I'll be ready to submit it.I have to admit that so far I am pleased with it.I masturbate before I read it so that I don't end up with sticky pages!

 

[vargas111]

I suggest the Mother's POV.

Althouught the 18 yrs is a constraint (how naive aremost 18 year olds) still it's OK. Boys are hoping/dreaming that a woman will seduce them from the itme they are 14 at least.

 

[fogbank]

For a first story, definitely keep a simple point of view, and go with one that is as close to your own perspective as possible. If you're a young man, make your narrator a young man. I've read far too many stories told from the perspective of a 35-year-old housewife, and it seems that the woman thinks the way you would expect a teenage guy to think. Which isn't to say that there aren't some great stories from a female perspective written by a man (and vice versa).

Personally, I don't really like the 'looking back' stories, especially the ones that start out along the lines of 'My mother and I have been lovers for fifteen years. Let me tell you how it all started...' I know the point of such an intro is to get the person interested right away, but for me, it's an immediate 'next!'. If you want to have a narrative where the narrator is telling the reader about something in the past, you've got to consider WHY the narrator is doing so. Personally (and this is a challenging thing to try for a first story), I prefer first-person stories to establish the identity of the audience.

For example, maybe it's Christmas time, a brother (aged 48) and a sister (aged 20) are together for the first time since their mother's funeral, and the brother tries to finally tell the young woman that he is infact her father as well as her brother, and to tell her this, he tries to explain the original seduction. Thus you have your narrator and audience, and a distinct (and probably very awkward) relationship between them, as well as a very real reason for your narrator to be telling the story.