Milky Mummies

[coolpen]

Milky mummies with cummy quims
Rounded hips that once were slim
Breasts engorged with baby’s feed
Arouse in me a primal need

They smell of milk and baby lotion
That drives in me an urgent notion
What if I were to lie with them
Would they welcome me within

Or are they so consumed with love
That all they think is far above
A base response to my carnal need
To fill them with my potent seed

Please let me lie with you quite soon
Squeezed together like loving spoons
My rod in you I gently thrust
While suckling at your milky breast

 

[champagne1982]

Milky mummies with cummy quims
Rounded hips that once were slim
Breasts engorged with baby’s feed
Arouse in me a primal need

They smell of milk and baby lotion
That drives in me an urgent notion
What if I were to lie with them
Would they welcome me within

Or are they so consumed with love
That all they think is far above
A base response to my carnal need
To fill them with my potent seed

Please let me lie with you quite soon
Squeezed together like loving spoons
My rod in you I gently thrust
While suckling at your milky breast

Fetish as built on Theodore Geisel's metrical foundation and his classic Seussian wit. Not my cup of tea but feel free to reach out on the forum for feedback. I know I don't think that I would spend any more time talking about than this but maybe someone else might enjoy it all. Welcome.

 

[36b7]

Mmm, sounds nice

 

[coolpen]

Fetish as built on Theodore Geisel's metrical foundation and his classic Seussian wit. Not my cup of tea but feel free to reach out on the forum for feedback. I know I don't think that I would spend any more time talking about than this but maybe someone else might enjoy it all. Welcome.

Thank you for your comments.
The opening line, which I rather like, had been hanging around in my head for a number of years after a close but unconsumated encounter so rather than waste it I wrote the piece but it's contrived and 'clunky'.
Far better to have stayed with the enchanting memory of the milky mummy with her cummy quim

 

[UnderYourSpell]

I'm not quite sure what the rhyme is supposed to be.
aabb ........ ccde ..........ffgg .........hhij.
If you're going to rhyme it's best to stick to some sort of pattern, there are plenty to chose from in form poetry.
You might like to have a look at Tzara's thread The Thread of Forms
Stick around, join in the challenges and welcome

 

[Piscator]

This February, there was a Seussian challenge here in PFD which might be of interest.