Middle Aged Mom teases son's grown up friends

[alexchubbs2014]

The story is about a middle aged (mid forties) woman who is a school teacher and off for the summer. She is finding life boring as she is alone. Her son is now moved out with his girlfriend and her husband walked out on them 5 years prior.

She needed to get her roof done and her son suggested using a few of his buddies that have started their own business. She agrees having known them for a couple of years. While they are up on the roof she is in her bedroom folding laundry and feeling restless when she overhears them talking. She listens in and is shocked as they are talking about sex and the girls they have slept with (some names she even recognizes). Then they talk about her and how is a MILF. The three of them all agree they would fuck her hard if given the chance.

She can't help but keep listening and gets excited. She decides to have some fun with them and gets dressed in some short shorts and tight tank without a bra to go do some gardening in the backyard. She likes knowing they are looking at her sexually.

The weather changes to rain and she runs inside the house. The guys get off the roof too and follow. Once inside they begin hitting on her and she plays along, again loving the attention but she starts losing control over the situation. They are more and more aggressive until she finds herself being groped and then they take her for the afternoon. Pictures are taken for their amusement and they leave her well fucked on her own couch.

The next day they return to finish the roof and she freely offers herself to them.

 

[Sean Renaud]

I believe you have what I would call an extra and unnecessary step with them leaving and her offering herself the next day. Its eems that overall we're better off with whatever inclement weather hitting being sufficient excuse for them to stay. Perhaps they have moved away and only one of them drove, isn't comfortable in the rain, had car trouble and they were waiting on a part that won't come now because of the weather (where I live the Santa Ana winds routinely tip 18 wheelers for example. I've been waiting on parts and had guys call the shop and say "I'm stuck and so and so, the winds kicked up I'll be there when I can." And telling him that whatever it is ain't worth his life.) Whatever it is we need to strike while the iron is hot.

I also think we should put the woman a little more in charge, she's perfectly happy that these young strapping men find her attractive. The author would have be a tad precise with their language because Lit's rules on kids and sex (is understandable) annoying so she couldn't have been attracted to them for years nor them her yada yada. But over all this is solid.

I don't often do this but you may be well served to write this yourself.

 

[mikendel]

We like the story. Leaving her on the couch used and cum filled is very sexy. They return the next day to finish the job and bring 2 more guys to help out. She see's the 2 new guys and knows the other told them about her. She goes out back again, only naked and tells them take a break and come inside. They use her for their pleasure and leave her on the couch again.

 

[alexchubbs2014]

Thanks for the ideas and feedback. I will definitely be writing this one myself.

 

[tnhardon]

I believe you have what I would call an extra and unnecessary step with them leaving and her offering herself the next day. Its eems that overall we're better off with whatever inclement weather hitting being sufficient excuse for them to stay. Perhaps they have moved away and only one of them drove, isn't comfortable in the rain, had car trouble and they were waiting on a part that won't come now because of the weather (where I live the Santa Ana winds routinely tip 18 wheelers for example. I've been waiting on parts and had guys call the shop and say "I'm stuck and so and so, the winds kicked up I'll be there when I can." And telling him that whatever it is ain't worth his life.) Whatever it is we need to strike while the iron is hot.

I also think we should put the woman a little more in charge, she's perfectly happy that these young strapping men find her attractive. The author would have be a tad precise with their language because Lit's rules on kids and sex (is understandable) annoying so she couldn't have been attracted to them for years nor them her yada yada. But over all this is solid.

I don't often do this but you may be well served to write this yourself.

I agree with Sean, don't add the unnecessary step. You have a good scenario lined up, no need to waste it.

I think it is pretty obvious that children wouldn't be running their own roofing business; however, it is true that you need to make sure to avoid the under 18 stuff at all costs. I think that you are safe with saying stuff along the lines of: "She never saw them as anything more than kids, but now that she saw these young muscular young men working on the roof..." And so on and so forth.

Personally, I would replace the braless gardening with tanning by the pool or something. I realize that is a bit cliche, but there is a reason it is used so often. Seeing a hot mom parading in a bikini is a nice image.

Definitely give the mom the control in this story. It is very hot to know that she heard all of this through the roof and that she is taking the initiative to try and fan the flames of their lust. It is okay for the guys to flirt with her, but keep it clear that the mom is in charge and enjoying the situation.

Please share when done. Look forward to reading it.

 

[Sean Renaud]

^^^ Really that I did not lay into that heavily enough. Do not involve kids, I do not agree with the Lit rule for a number of reasons that I will not go into. I'll just state that it's a hard rule, if there is any hint that she was attracted to them while they were still underaged will get it knocked down even if they are 30 now.

Just make them nondescripte 20 somethings. If you aren't working with a High School scenario life is easier with someone who is twenty something.

 

[alexchubbs2014]

I'll be referencing them from being in college together. I don't want to be involved in any debates over age rules or references.

 

[Sean Renaud]

That's for the best. A lot of us writers have gotten snagged on it in one way or another.