Means to an End

CreamyLady

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I seldom ask, but I'd like feedback on this story -- good, bad, indifferent.

Thank you.
 
I loved it. I really liked the way you wrote it from the girl's point of view, the way the hurt and the pleasure mingled together.

I also appreciated the man from the restaurant being rough, but not really cruel. All too often, rough sex gets equated with mean sex.

I give it two thumbs up!
 
I really liked this story too. The structure is simple but the subtleties of human behaviour are cleverly explored. I particularly loved the way you described the changes in the girl's demaeanour. Bittersweet humour at the end also works well.
CRaZy
 
Thank you, CRaZy. I was trying to show how she would change, like a chameleon, to match the needs of her client. I'm glad it came through.
 
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