http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=331099
This is a story I've been working on for some time. The beginning of it reflects my predilection for a "same thing repeated every day" theme, a la "Groundhog Day" and "50 First Dates", but unlike those flicks, there's nothing surreal, no Goldfield's Syndrome...just an admirer who sees a woman training for a marathon running the same route each day.
I've invested a lot in this story, so I'd like any frank criticism/feedback you might have, positive or negative. I'd like to make this story as good as it possibly can be.
One interesting note (interesting to me at least!) I was stuck in the middle of this story for some time, not knowing quite where to take it. In another thread of mine, in talking about sex scenes, Tickled Kitty posted the comment "Maybe you just need a little practice." Somehow, that made it a bit clearer where the story should be headed. In fact, that line actually appears in the story. Whether I pulled off a decent tale, though, remains to be seen. I thought it was kinda cool how a seemingly innocuous comment turned an entire story around...But thanks, TK, you helped out when you didn't even know it.
Thanks, all.
This is a story I've been working on for some time. The beginning of it reflects my predilection for a "same thing repeated every day" theme, a la "Groundhog Day" and "50 First Dates", but unlike those flicks, there's nothing surreal, no Goldfield's Syndrome...just an admirer who sees a woman training for a marathon running the same route each day.
I've invested a lot in this story, so I'd like any frank criticism/feedback you might have, positive or negative. I'd like to make this story as good as it possibly can be.
One interesting note (interesting to me at least!) I was stuck in the middle of this story for some time, not knowing quite where to take it. In another thread of mine, in talking about sex scenes, Tickled Kitty posted the comment "Maybe you just need a little practice." Somehow, that made it a bit clearer where the story should be headed. In fact, that line actually appears in the story. Whether I pulled off a decent tale, though, remains to be seen. I thought it was kinda cool how a seemingly innocuous comment turned an entire story around...But thanks, TK, you helped out when you didn't even know it.
Thanks, all.