Love to get feedback

[UTOutdoorGirl]

So far I have gotten some very positive feedback from some stories I have posted and would love to get some more, both positive and negative on what you like about it, what you don't and how I can improve it. I do have a few more finished stories and one very long unfinished story which I plan to edit and post in pieces as I get the editing done.

My currently posted stories are at:

Coach

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=133709

Red Eye

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=133829

Sushi and maybe more

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=133832

Toy Story

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=136595

Again thanks for all the great input I have already received and I am looking forward to more so I can make these and future stories better.

Love,

Lynne

xoxox

 

[Lycon]

The sushi story

Nice story, well written, but I did feel let down at the end, which was very sudden. It's not that she didn't go through with it, it's that she made up her mind very quickly.

Perhaps you could try:

Will she? Won't she? Will she? Won't she? Will she? She won't.

At the moment it's

Will she? Will she? Will she? Will she? Will she? She won't

That aside, I thought it a very erotic story.

Good luck

 

[UTOutdoorGirl]

A couple of more stories posted

I have posted a few more stories since the first group. Look them up by checking me as an author. Would love to get some more feedback. Have had some really good feedback so far that is helping me make these stories better and myself more polished
as a writer.

Thanks to everyone

Lynne (a.k.a. UTOutdoorGirl)