Love Poem

[Beatles5]

Here is a love poem that I taped to my neighbor's door.
Let me know what you think...

From Your Eyes by Beatles

I see the reservoir of love...
And beauty...
And warmth...
Radiating from your eyes.

And into my heart.

Where your spirit...
Works its achingly tender but beautiful magic.
Within the realm of my soul.
Filling me with the light of joy.
Making me feel so whole.

If only for a fleeting moment.

When I gaze upon your eyes,
I am drawn into the vastness of infinity.
Setting my heart on fire....
With the eternal flickering glow.
Of a million floating candles,
With their fates resting on the raging currents of love.

I want to dive into the river.


Let me know what you think.

 

[DaisyMay65]

greta poem..... wonderful!

 

[WickedEve]

What I want to know is what did the neighbor say? Is your neighbor married? If so, then you have some juicy material for a poem.

 

[Beatles5]

Next Door

Wicked Eve,

Yes...she is married.

 

[Beatles5]

Poem

Wicked Eve,

What did you think about the poem?
Your opinion is important to me.
Spare no punches in you critique.
I can take it...LOL...

 

[WickedEve]

Re: Next Door

Wicked Eve,

Yes...she is married.

You left a love poem on a married woman's door? What about the husband? I bet there's a great story here!

 

[WickedEve]

Re: Poem

Wicked Eve,

What did you think about the poem?
Your opinion is important to me.
Spare no punches in you critique.
I can take it...LOL...

I will take extra time later today and read it more closely. My first impression was that it would be great to get a poem like this from a man, but as far as reading it online, I wouldn't be interested because so many poems read very similar.

 

[Rybka]

Re: Re: Poem

I will take extra time later today and read it more closely. My first impression was that it would be great to get a poem like this from a man, but as far as reading it online, I wouldn't be interested because so many poems read very similar.

Must say that I agree with WE's first impression. It might be very nice to receive, but I would not be interested in reading it as a non-involved reader. The theme is very common and the images/words are greatly overused.
But, Hey! Always remember that if you and your intended audience like what you write that is all that is really important.


Regards,                                 Rybka

 

[Beatles5]

That is exactly the wayI feel, Rybka.
But thats the problem with poems of a personal nature.
They are all familiar.
Don't you think so?

 

[Beatles5]

I didn't know she was married....

Not only did I post a love poem... but I also put a half dozen white roses on her doorstep last week.

Her husband wasn't happy but he is over it now.

She told him that I mentioned to her that I wrote poetry and she asked to see some of my work. And that calmed him down.

And she asked me if I had a web page. She wants to read more.

 

[Beatles5]

Maybe that is why that bullett came flying through my window last night...LOL...

 

[WickedEve]

It sounds like you're living an adventure! lol
Maybe you need to find a single woman's house to leave love poetry.

 

[Beatles5]

The Russian Woman

I met her husband the other day.
He's a short little Puerto Rican with a bald head.