Lost Love

[BlackSnake]

A guy meet a hot babe, Carmen and hit it off immediately. He's is young and not ready for a serious relationship. He is put off by some personal issue that he finds out about, and breaks it off with her.

He has many relationship, but none of them seem to be right. He figures out that all the things that he wants in a relationship Carmen meets them all.

After years of search for that special feeling he has lost, he meets Carmen again. But Carmen has a family and life of her own.

The connection between them is still there.

 

[BlackSnake]

Anybody have ideas or comments that might make this idea more interesting?

 

[sunandshadow]

it needs an ending? And I'm curious what's so special about her.

 

[emap]

I think the best way to do this is they find each other again, and they try and be just friends, but one night they get a little to drunk and fall into bed together.

After the glorious night she is torn between staying with her loving husband and kids, or running off with the one that got away. He is torn between continuing their relationship in bed or breaking up her family, he really likes her kids and husband.

Of course you can go a third way, husband finds out and makes him his bitch and they leave her for each other.

Well could be a happy love triangle to I suppose, most women like watching two guys do each other, at least I do.

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

Unfortunately, Snake,
The way you outline the story, it ends without an ending. The image I get is of Gatsby standing alone, peering out across the harbor at the partys. That's an ending that I don't think would be very satisfying for the readers.

It might be a better ending if after they've been apart for a number of years they meet again. Both of them are divored/widowed and they can pick up again where they left off. That lets the story roller coaster and build to a ball blowing sex scene at the end.

Just my thoughts.

JJ

 

[BlackSnake]

Unfortunately, Snake,
The way you outline the story, it ends without an ending. The image I get is of Gatsby standing alone, peering out across the harbor at the partys. That's an ending that I don't think would be very satisfying for the readers.

It might be a better ending if after they've been apart for a number of years they meet again. Both of them are divored/widowed and they can pick up again where they left off. That lets the story roller coaster and build to a ball blowing sex scene at the end.

Just my thoughts.

JJ

Yes, I like them meeting again after many years. I imagine them both with families. Maybe their spouses are with them, or children. The guy and Carmen have unresolved issues.

Their spouses agree to allow them to meet alone.

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

Yes, I like them meeting again after many years. I imagine them both with families. Maybe their spouses are with them, or children. The guy and Carmen have unresolved issues.

Their spouses agree to allow them to meet alone.

Hmmm... I have a request for an interracial thing... This might work for that too. I'll have to think about it and get back to you.

JJ

 

[silverwhisper]

that could be a really interesting story, i think. but it seems too long to be a single one, at least the way i'm seeing it in my head.

ed

 

[BlackSnake]

Hmmm... I have a request for an interracial thing... This might work for that too. I'll have to think about it and get back to you.

JJ

I imagine the guy as about an average 6'1" trimmed medium toned black man, and Carmen as a 5'6" brunette with green eyes, pale white skin, medium breast, flat ass, but very shapely legs. Definately interracial.

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

I imagine the guy as about an average 6'1" trimmed medium toned black man, and Carmen as a 5'6" brunette with green eyes, pale white skin, medium breast, flat ass, but very shapely legs. Definately interracial.

I'll see if I can work something up for ya, Snakey

 

[BlackSnake]

I'll see if I can work something up for ya, Snakey

She was awesome, but he was too young and stupid to realize that she was the one for him. They were perfect together and had lots of fun and sex. She was kiky enough to flash him in public. He drank of her presences. She had even taken him to met her mother. His friends envied him for being with her.

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

that could be a really interesting story, i think. but it seems too long to be a single one, at least the way i'm seeing it in my head.

ed

I'm thinking 2-3 Lit pages for the initial story. The intervening years are only a heading. Then one more Lit page for them to get together again and end...

Would take about a month or so of hard work, I think.

Snake, What POV are you thinking??

1) His as a story teller as the action takes place
2) His as remembering the story
3) Third Person

Because of the time leap, I'm thinking #2 would be easist, but any one would work.

 

[BlackSnake]

I'm thinking 2-3 Lit pages for the initial story. The intervening years are only a heading. Then one more Lit page for them to get together again and end...

Would take about a month or so of hard work, I think.

Snake, What POV are you thinking??

1) His as a story teller as the action takes place
2) His as remembering the story
3) Third Person

Because of the time leap, I'm thinking #2 would be easist, but any one would work.

It just me, but I like stories written in the third person. From the guy's POV. I started writing it myself, but I think that it is a good setup for many stories.