Lost Love and New Start

[BlackSnake]

A man recalls the great times with his beloved lost wife. The fun and adventures they had together were unmeasureable.

His wife's last wish was for him to find someone to enjoy the rest of his life with. He would promise her anything, but he couldn't imagine being with anyone but her.

He went to one of his late wife's favorite vacations spots and sat drinking at a bar on the beach. He begins to tell the bartender tells of his wife. Unknown to him, a woman sitting alone is listening.


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[sirhugs]

great start.

 

[BlackSnake]

I'd like the stories to have more depth to them. More character building, more hardcore action, more drama, more, more, more, ....

 

[nushu2]

This idea has potential to be a lot more. It could be very intimate but it would be long and take a lot of work. I can imagine pages of dialogue before the action begins. Or, she could just get him drunk.

 

[BlackSnake]

This idea has potential to be a lot more. It could be very intimate but it would be long and take a lot of work. I can imagine pages of dialogue before the action begins. Or, she could just get him drunk.

Naw, the man remembers the details of his love affair with his late wife...action....he tells stories of his wife in fond memories to the bartender....action

But yes, long. The woman overhears his tells and become excited feeling that she would have enjoyed the same things he tells about.

Finally, she introduces herself.

 

[nushu2]

You're looking at a very sensitive kind of story here. To make it work, you're going to have to relate to the main character very closely. Think of something personal or of someone you know very well. Simple style with symbolic images might work.

ie: "Ya know," he said as he ran his finger around the rim of the dewed glass, "I never went down on a woman until her." He raised the glass to his grinning lips, indulging in the memory. Subconsiously and just slightly, his tongue peeked out as he drank.

 

[sirhugs]

You're looking at a very sensitive kind of story here. To make it work, you're going to have to relate to the main character very closely. Think of something personal or of someone you know very well. Simple style with symbolic images might work.

ie: "Ya know," he said as he ran his finger around the rim of the dewed glass, "I never went down on a woman until her." He raised the glass to his grinning lips, indulging in the memory. Subconsiously and just slightly, his tongue peeked out as he drank.

nice start!