Looking to drop a character in somewhere,
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Um....yeah...that's alot of stuff.
My first recommendation as an experienced RPer here is to take a look at the threads that are currently active, i.e. the threads on the first page, take a look at the OOC threads for the RPs, read the material and if you're interested in joining, contact the person who started the thread.
Also, take a look at the IC threads, even if you aren't interested in joining, simply because there are some good stories running that have good writers involved.
Second recommendation: ditch the intro post. When you join an RP, you have to write to make the setting and several other criteria. Your intro as it is now, isn't going to of any use in most of the RPs here in the ORP.
Third recommendation: strip down the character bio to just the bare essentials, like name, gender, height, race, etc.. I've got experience with this concept of creating a character that can fit into multiple stories lines with a little bit of tweaking.
I have one character where I originally had an almost entire story surrounding him, but in order to use him in an RP here, I had to strip that story from him and create a new background and history. I basically took away everything but the body, the concept of a character. With that, I can move the character around to different stories, keeping the person the same, but changes the background and history. This "bare bones" character is by far the most flexible of any character that I've created
I have another character that is on the opposite end of the spectrum from the "bare bones" character: he was designed for a Star Wars RP and only for a Star Wars RP. I've used him in two SW RPs (so far not beyond an intro post, unfortunately), and the only things I've changed about him are the time and place of his background/history, and also adjusted his equipment to fit the time frame of the story.
So, to recap, my recommendations for you are: 1) look around and find a story you want to get involved in, 2) ditch the intro post, and 3) strip the character down to just "bare bones."
My first recommendation as an experienced RPer here is to take a look at the threads that are currently active, i.e. the threads on the first page, take a look at the OOC threads for the RPs, read the material and if you're interested in joining, contact the person who started the thread.
Also, take a look at the IC threads, even if you aren't interested in joining, simply because there are some good stories running that have good writers involved.
Second recommendation: ditch the intro post. When you join an RP, you have to write to make the setting and several other criteria. Your intro as it is now, isn't going to of any use in most of the RPs here in the ORP.
Third recommendation: strip down the character bio to just the bare essentials, like name, gender, height, race, etc.. I've got experience with this concept of creating a character that can fit into multiple stories lines with a little bit of tweaking.
I have one character where I originally had an almost entire story surrounding him, but in order to use him in an RP here, I had to strip that story from him and create a new background and history. I basically took away everything but the body, the concept of a character. With that, I can move the character around to different stories, keeping the person the same, but changes the background and history. This "bare bones" character is by far the most flexible of any character that I've created
I have another character that is on the opposite end of the spectrum from the "bare bones" character: he was designed for a Star Wars RP and only for a Star Wars RP. I've used him in two SW RPs (so far not beyond an intro post, unfortunately), and the only things I've changed about him are the time and place of his background/history, and also adjusted his equipment to fit the time frame of the story.
So, to recap, my recommendations for you are: 1) look around and find a story you want to get involved in, 2) ditch the intro post, and 3) strip the character down to just "bare bones."
Good lord- my head's gonna explode. On most yahoo groups, they are almost Nazi about the detailed biographies and up-to-snuff writing samples, and intro posts. I'm afraid I type *way* too much to ever match up very well here. I'm just gonna take my long-windyness and go hide now, Lol! Thanks so much for your help!
Jedi_Khan
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Oh, come now, don't be scared. It's actually a lot easier than it might seem. Being an RPer on this board for almost two years now (where the hell did the time go?), I greatly appreciate attention to details, as I myself pay attention to details.
That whole bit about a "bare bones" character is simply for when you have a character that you've created for one story and would like to transfer to another, especially when the two stories are very different. The "bare bones" is just another step in character creation, one that is totally optional considering the fact that many people create their characters from scratch for a particular story. With a "bare bones" character, think of it as a blank template, where you have a framework already set up, you just need to fill in the details, and you can be as detailed as you want.
Also, that "ditch the intro post" bit, that was referring to the intro post you had already prepared. It was indeed long winded, but more importantly, it wouldn't have fit into any story that is currently running, I believe. Intro posts are a requirement when just starting in a story, as they introduce the character, of course. You simply need to write one from scratch.
We need good writers here in the ORP, writers who hold themselves to a high standard. I've seen a few too many writers on here just write crap posts, like little to no attention to spelling and grammar, or even to details from other people's posts.
So, come out of hiding, have a look around, and try your level best to fit in. The people that frequent the ORP are nice people, always willing to help, just as I am. Some can be brutally honest, some give sugar-coated honesty, some will lie through their teeth, some will offer constructive critism, and yet others will simply not give a damn. But that's the way life is, isn't it?
That whole bit about a "bare bones" character is simply for when you have a character that you've created for one story and would like to transfer to another, especially when the two stories are very different. The "bare bones" is just another step in character creation, one that is totally optional considering the fact that many people create their characters from scratch for a particular story. With a "bare bones" character, think of it as a blank template, where you have a framework already set up, you just need to fill in the details, and you can be as detailed as you want.
Also, that "ditch the intro post" bit, that was referring to the intro post you had already prepared. It was indeed long winded, but more importantly, it wouldn't have fit into any story that is currently running, I believe. Intro posts are a requirement when just starting in a story, as they introduce the character, of course. You simply need to write one from scratch.
We need good writers here in the ORP, writers who hold themselves to a high standard. I've seen a few too many writers on here just write crap posts, like little to no attention to spelling and grammar, or even to details from other people's posts.
So, come out of hiding, have a look around, and try your level best to fit in. The people that frequent the ORP are nice people, always willing to help, just as I am. Some can be brutally honest, some give sugar-coated honesty, some will lie through their teeth, some will offer constructive critism, and yet others will simply not give a damn. But that's the way life is, isn't it?
K i see this... then i think... what would an example be...
I just made this character for a RP that... aint gonna happen i don't think. so what would you do to this bio/char.
Character sheet:
Name
Erip-Mav
gender
M
Age
1300 years seen. Born 450,000 years ago
race / ancestry
Vampire. One of the first. original race being Human
Looks
Pale skin, wears dark clothes rather than bright ones to enhance the appearance. looks about 25, Medium Build, Extremly Fit apearance. think aristocracy. Long black hair, Matted and unkept. Unearthly Beauty to go with it all. Eyes change color depending on hunger (Hungry = black/red, Fed = hazel with black star in left eye.
elements
Law, Chaos and Cosmos with minor wind abilities, schooled in Illusion and Enchantment, Abjuration spells are extremely effective against him. Also knows Conjury and has select abilities with it that are mastered
Other magic notes
All magics relating to life have a negative impact on him. extra strength from Death magic. Alchemy and Evocation are the only styles He can use. Sun light nullifies all of his magic and physical advantages to that of when he was human. Perfect night vision
gear
All gear is Blood Stained, Black cloak, Black Katana and a simple Monks belt.
History
Born on earth before gaia became self aware. was trapped within and came out as a Vampire. Has lived for several centuries and has mastered Illusion and enchantment, Is in the school of Conjury but has Mastered several spells. Has seen 3 gods in his life and has been killed 5 times. He has tried to commit suicide 20 times and has found that his body will rebuild if even one finger is left whole. Has lost hundreds of years through this and is now just finalizing his repairs since his last attempt. The world has made many advancements and he will learn to deal with these.
IC
I awoke from my painful reconstruction slumber. It had been 20,00 years of pain and I was not all that interested in trying it again any time soon. Looking around the room I find myself encased in a small coffin. I know this because it is the 8th time somebody has decided my skeleton needed to be kept in one.
Looks like a long 30 years. I think to myself as I cast some minor wind magic and slowly rip the wooden case apart. I can tell it is daylight above so I begin to carve out somewhere to work when my power fails me in the direct sunlight.
Four hours later I wearily climbed out of the hole in the cemetery, and I began to look for someone to clue me in.
I swear. I only want to TALK to someone. I told myself as I began the trek to find some form of civilization.
I just made this character for a RP that... aint gonna happen i don't think. so what would you do to this bio/char.
Character sheet:
Name
Erip-Mav
gender
M
Age
1300 years seen. Born 450,000 years ago
race / ancestry
Vampire. One of the first. original race being Human
Looks
Pale skin, wears dark clothes rather than bright ones to enhance the appearance. looks about 25, Medium Build, Extremly Fit apearance. think aristocracy. Long black hair, Matted and unkept. Unearthly Beauty to go with it all. Eyes change color depending on hunger (Hungry = black/red, Fed = hazel with black star in left eye.
elements
Law, Chaos and Cosmos with minor wind abilities, schooled in Illusion and Enchantment, Abjuration spells are extremely effective against him. Also knows Conjury and has select abilities with it that are mastered
Other magic notes
All magics relating to life have a negative impact on him. extra strength from Death magic. Alchemy and Evocation are the only styles He can use. Sun light nullifies all of his magic and physical advantages to that of when he was human. Perfect night vision
gear
All gear is Blood Stained, Black cloak, Black Katana and a simple Monks belt.
History
Born on earth before gaia became self aware. was trapped within and came out as a Vampire. Has lived for several centuries and has mastered Illusion and enchantment, Is in the school of Conjury but has Mastered several spells. Has seen 3 gods in his life and has been killed 5 times. He has tried to commit suicide 20 times and has found that his body will rebuild if even one finger is left whole. Has lost hundreds of years through this and is now just finalizing his repairs since his last attempt. The world has made many advancements and he will learn to deal with these.
IC
I awoke from my painful reconstruction slumber. It had been 20,00 years of pain and I was not all that interested in trying it again any time soon. Looking around the room I find myself encased in a small coffin. I know this because it is the 8th time somebody has decided my skeleton needed to be kept in one.
Looks like a long 30 years. I think to myself as I cast some minor wind magic and slowly rip the wooden case apart. I can tell it is daylight above so I begin to carve out somewhere to work when my power fails me in the direct sunlight.
Four hours later I wearily climbed out of the hole in the cemetery, and I began to look for someone to clue me in.
I swear. I only want to TALK to someone. I told myself as I began the trek to find some form of civilization.
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. plus it gives others an example of how they would do it
Jedi_Khan
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Well, I know almost absolutely nothing about vampires, but it seems to me that the character you've designed is very specific. From what I do know of vampires is that they don't really have much in the way of magic, aside from some sort of telepathy and/or hypnosis-inducing ability.
So, with that in mind, I'd drop the magic until I've found out what the GM will allow. The age and ancestory would go next, pending approval by the GM, which in turn would lead to the history getting the axe. The IC post would also be filed away, because it relies heavily on the history that just got axed.
Things I would keep are his name, gender, physical description (add in his hieght), the fact that he's a vampire, and his gear. Everything else would be taken off and put to one side, where you can easily pick it up and put it back on after getting the approval of the GM.
And that's as verstile as a pre-made character can get, being nothing more than a name and body. Everything else will have to be tailored to meet the requirements set by the person running the story.
Any questions?
So, with that in mind, I'd drop the magic until I've found out what the GM will allow. The age and ancestory would go next, pending approval by the GM, which in turn would lead to the history getting the axe. The IC post would also be filed away, because it relies heavily on the history that just got axed.
Things I would keep are his name, gender, physical description (add in his hieght), the fact that he's a vampire, and his gear. Everything else would be taken off and put to one side, where you can easily pick it up and put it back on after getting the approval of the GM.
And that's as verstile as a pre-made character can get, being nothing more than a name and body. Everything else will have to be tailored to meet the requirements set by the person running the story.
Any questions?
to be honest... i was thinking almost the same. I would also almost axe some of the extra shit in there as well but that depends on what definition of vampire we are looking at. the IC is reliant on a GM true. all in all I think what isnt there but needs to be is specific traits allowed to all vampires in general. IE nightvision beguilement some illusion maybe. other than that yeah.
thanks for the character stripping
thanks for the character stripping
hmm i can try winging it then adapt it to some criteria?
winging it version.
Nor-gart.
Male 28
Human
about 6ft, blue eyes, medium build, Black hair, slightly suntaned skin (Pakeha ( means White Man in Maori)), Tattoo of a dragon covering his left arm and shoulder.
Trained in 3 martial arts, self proclaimed consuneer of woman. confident to the point of arogence. street smart.
that ok for a generic guy?
winging it version.
Nor-gart.
Male 28
Human
about 6ft, blue eyes, medium build, Black hair, slightly suntaned skin (Pakeha ( means White Man in Maori)), Tattoo of a dragon covering his left arm and shoulder.
Trained in 3 martial arts, self proclaimed consuneer of woman. confident to the point of arogence. street smart.
that ok for a generic guy?
dam you had to say starwars lol.
Nor-gart.
Male 28
Human
about 6ft, blue eyes, medium build, Black hair, slightly suntaned skin (Pakeha ( means White Man in Maori)), Tattoo of a dragon covering his left arm and shoulder.
Trained in 3 martial arts, self proclaimed consuneer of woman. confident to the point of arogence. street smart.
THE FORCE
is mediocre in this one. (couldnt resist)
Alignment - tettering on the edge to going to the dark side. (vengance leads to anger... etc)
Current residence is on Naboo.
History - was never seen as required for training by the jedi, was missed however has been using the force to improve his lot in life. Has been spying on other 'cadets' as they were taught so he could learn the basics.
only knowing the basics has forced him to become quick witted and original in his use of the Force.
His girlfriend was killed during the war. he has tried to deal with it but is slowly being over come with vengance.... he has no target and has become very skilled in infomation gatthering. we join him 4 years after his girlfriend died and he has been studying both lightsaber use (he built one from scratch while with his Girlfriend) and basic hand to hand combat. is one of the most proficient hand to hand fighters his sensei's (all three) have seen. skilled in tae kwon doo, Karate, and bushido (began studying bushido as a child)
Nor-gart.
Male 28
Human
about 6ft, blue eyes, medium build, Black hair, slightly suntaned skin (Pakeha ( means White Man in Maori)), Tattoo of a dragon covering his left arm and shoulder.
Trained in 3 martial arts, self proclaimed consuneer of woman. confident to the point of arogence. street smart.
THE FORCE
is mediocre in this one. (couldnt resist)
Alignment - tettering on the edge to going to the dark side. (vengance leads to anger... etc)
Current residence is on Naboo.
History - was never seen as required for training by the jedi, was missed however has been using the force to improve his lot in life. Has been spying on other 'cadets' as they were taught so he could learn the basics.
only knowing the basics has forced him to become quick witted and original in his use of the Force.
His girlfriend was killed during the war. he has tried to deal with it but is slowly being over come with vengance.... he has no target and has become very skilled in infomation gatthering. we join him 4 years after his girlfriend died and he has been studying both lightsaber use (he built one from scratch while with his Girlfriend) and basic hand to hand combat. is one of the most proficient hand to hand fighters his sensei's (all three) have seen. skilled in tae kwon doo, Karate, and bushido (began studying bushido as a child)
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Alright, it needs a little tweaking.
First, which war? Second, he's Force-sensitive, yet the Jedi didn't see fit to train him? Third, what "cadets"? Fourth, a non-Jedi/Sith having built and is using a lightsaber? Fifth, tae kwon doo, karate, and bushido do not exist with those names in the Star Wars universe.
As you can see, I'm a bit of a hard liner when it comes to Star Wars.
First, which war? Second, he's Force-sensitive, yet the Jedi didn't see fit to train him? Third, what "cadets"? Fourth, a non-Jedi/Sith having built and is using a lightsaber? Fifth, tae kwon doo, karate, and bushido do not exist with those names in the Star Wars universe.
As you can see, I'm a bit of a hard liner when it comes to Star Wars.
Yeah I didnt know what to do about the Martial arts thing. also by 'cadets' i meant padawan (its been a while for me and Starwars.) as for the force. he wasnt thought of as strong enough to merit training. the lightsaber is a bit of a twist that doesnt REALLY need to be in there. i guees i shouldnt build a char and watch tv at the same time... I just wanted to give him some skills since i am denying him so many others.
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Well, when I first saw the generic, I immediately thought that this character would fit a mercenary profile rather well.
In the Star Wars universe, everyone is Force-senstive to some degree. The only difference being how strong the connection is. If you can use the Force consciously, then the Jedi would train you.
Alright, now let's fit the generic to another set of criteria: the Illusion Vale.
In the Star Wars universe, everyone is Force-senstive to some degree. The only difference being how strong the connection is. If you can use the Force consciously, then the Jedi would train you.
Alright, now let's fit the generic to another set of criteria: the Illusion Vale.
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It's an actual story here in the ORP that's been around for more than a year. It's in a bit of a slump at the moment, but at least it's still moving.
http://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?t=511216
http://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?t=511216
OK
I think i can deal with this one then
Nor-gart.
Male 28
Human
about 6ft, blue eyes, medium build, Black hair, slightly suntaned skin (Pakeha ( means White Man in Maori)), Tattoo of a dragon covering his left arm and shoulder.
Trained in 3 martial arts, self proclaimed consuneer of woman. confident to the point of arogence. street smart.
EARTH
Military - spec ops
happy with his lot in life he was on a salary that kept him happy, didnt need much in the way of funds but was forever out doing 'secret' missions that gave him the thrill to keep going.
think 007 but not so gadgety,
Veil.
Vampire
alignment by nature is evil however this is struggling against his morals from when he left earth. has super speed and strength at the cost of other peoples lives, maintains appearance and the sun has the same effect on him that high level radiation would. he can live in it but he gets sunburnt very easily and it takes twice as long as normal to heal any sunlight damage.
Transition circumstances
Was just finishing a basic training mission when he got sucked into a vortex to the Veil. He comes to in the Veil and thinks that this is all a training excersize... until the cravings begin. Still trying to understand it all when we meet him
I think i can deal with this one then
Nor-gart.
Male 28
Human
about 6ft, blue eyes, medium build, Black hair, slightly suntaned skin (Pakeha ( means White Man in Maori)), Tattoo of a dragon covering his left arm and shoulder.
Trained in 3 martial arts, self proclaimed consuneer of woman. confident to the point of arogence. street smart.
EARTH
Military - spec ops
happy with his lot in life he was on a salary that kept him happy, didnt need much in the way of funds but was forever out doing 'secret' missions that gave him the thrill to keep going.
think 007 but not so gadgety,
Veil.
Vampire
alignment by nature is evil however this is struggling against his morals from when he left earth. has super speed and strength at the cost of other peoples lives, maintains appearance and the sun has the same effect on him that high level radiation would. he can live in it but he gets sunburnt very easily and it takes twice as long as normal to heal any sunlight damage.
Transition circumstances
Was just finishing a basic training mission when he got sucked into a vortex to the Veil. He comes to in the Veil and thinks that this is all a training excersize... until the cravings begin. Still trying to understand it all when we meet him
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