Chicklet
plays well with self
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Okay, here's the deal. When I started writing I would sit here, at my computer, type a couple of paragraphs and then run them by my boyfriend. He would tell me what he liked, what turned him on, what he thought didn't really seem quite right. These were some of the best <in my opinion> stories that I got done.
My problem is that my boyfriend is bored now, and I'm looking for someone basically to do the same thing with a story I am writing right now.
This is the story: It's a non human story about a man who sees this girl, very innocent, virginal looking girl, and he sets out to seduce her. He thinks he's putting all the moves on and that she's falling into every classic trap. He expects to be initiating her into the ways of love etc etc stupid cliches, but as they're rolling around in bed and he finally gets her where he wants her, she bites his neck and surprise she's been hunting him.
I am specifically looking for someone turned on by the idea that he thinks he is seducing an innocent. You don't have to be turned on by the vampire thing; I really want the seduction to be a big part of the story. I want it to be a turn on that he's trying to seduce this girl, and succeeding.
If you're interested please post here, or PM me, or what have you.
What I would do is write a bit of the story, and then email it to you to see what you liked/disliked/thought worked/thought didn't make any sense.
Chicklet
My problem is that my boyfriend is bored now, and I'm looking for someone basically to do the same thing with a story I am writing right now.
This is the story: It's a non human story about a man who sees this girl, very innocent, virginal looking girl, and he sets out to seduce her. He thinks he's putting all the moves on and that she's falling into every classic trap. He expects to be initiating her into the ways of love etc etc stupid cliches, but as they're rolling around in bed and he finally gets her where he wants her, she bites his neck and surprise she's been hunting him.
I am specifically looking for someone turned on by the idea that he thinks he is seducing an innocent. You don't have to be turned on by the vampire thing; I really want the seduction to be a big part of the story. I want it to be a turn on that he's trying to seduce this girl, and succeeding.
If you're interested please post here, or PM me, or what have you.
What I would do is write a bit of the story, and then email it to you to see what you liked/disliked/thought worked/thought didn't make any sense.
Chicklet
