Looking for someone interested in Fantasy

[YummyTiger]

Hello,

I have recently begun a multi-chapter fantasy piece and would like some feedback. My editor is wonderful, but fantasy is not his cup of tea; so while he can give me good grammatical feedback, he can not offer alot of insight into whether the story is intriguing.

The story is entitled Belar the Mighty: The Lost Sister and I currently have two chapters finished. Each chapter is roughly 3,500 words. The first chapter has been edited, but the second has not yet. Even without editing, you can expect a fairly polished piece of work. I revise my stuff many times before I ask for help.

I have always wanted to write fantasy and this is my longest attempt so far. I would absolutely love to know what you think. PM me if you're interested and thanks for your time.

 

[elfin_odalisque]

You would do better if you tried the Editors' Forum. There are some really helpful and clued-up guys there.

We lazy types just come in when you've posted and pick you to pieces. (joke)

 

[freshface]

I second Elfin's suggestion. You'll get a better response over in the Editor's Forum, although it sounds like you already have an editor. One method for story help is to go look at your favorite Sci-Fi/Fantasy writers on this site. Choose one who writes solid stories, has passable grammar skills, and has posted a story recently enough to still be around. Send that author a private comment asking him/her to take a look at your story.

 

[YummyTiger]

Wasn't really looking for an editor, just feedback. I did get a PM from one person who agreed to look over the story. I will probably just end up posting it to Literotica and seeing how it fares once I hear back from them.

Thanks for the replies though.

 

[Crescent_Flame]

Hi YummyTiger

Have sent you a brief PM with some feedback - let me know if you want more, or if you want ideas on my own fantasy writing style.

For anyone else hesitant - it's encouraging stuff - I recommend giving it a blast

 

[YummyTiger]

If anyone is interested in reading the story, it is now posted.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=383663

The second chapter is also pending, so should be up in a day or so. Thanks again Crescent_Flame, the story is so much better for the feedback you provided.

Let me know what you think if you read it!