looking for some feedback on my novella

[musicankane]

this was my first attempt at writing a erotic piece with a more set storyline, and actually is a revised verson of a story I wrote in high school.

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=196365

parts one and two are posted and part three should be up soon too.

Thank you for your help in making my stories the best they can be,

From an aspiring author; Musicankane

 

[janiexx]

this was my first attempt at writing a erotic piece with a more set storyline, and actually is a revised verson of a story I wrote in high school.

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=196365

parts one and two are posted and part three should be up soon too.

Thank you for your help in making my stories the best they can be,

From an aspiring author; Musicankane

Hello,

I started reading your story this morning but had to go to work. However, I liked it so much I continued reading when I got home, so you must be doing something right!

I enjoyed it very much and look forward to reading more. I can't put my finger on exactly why - maybe I feel sympathy for your character or maybe it's the good relationship between him and Maxine/Jessica.

Anyway, keep on with it.
janiexx

 

[SesameStreet]

I have read what you have posted of your Novella. I liked it. It is very well written. Sci Fi Erotica is quite popular right now. If you can get it up to about 45,000 word count try submitting it to Renaissance Publishing.

Renaissance Publishing


I have a feeling that your work would be accepted.

 

[Darkniciad]

I like the storyline, but the frequent spelling errors kept pulling me up short.

I would suggest running your submissions through a spell checker ( Microsoft Word works well enough for me, I'm helpless without it. I still have to look up a few things on http://www.dictionary.com and add them to the built in dictionary on occasion ) which will catch most of these issues and help the readability a lot.

I would suggest doing this and putting up edited versions of your current chapters before you continue on with new submissions, so that people seeing the latest chapter in the "New" section of the site and going back to the beginning aren't turned away from your work by the spelling issues.

When you submit an edited version, use the same title and add a tagline to the title such as *EDITED* and make a note in the Notes to the webmaster section that this is an edited version which should replace the existing chapter on Lit.

You have an interesting concept, just give it a once over in a spell checker and you'll be good to go

 

[AsylumSeeker]

I downloaded VisualThesaurus and find it of great value. One benefit, it even has "dirty" words you won't find elsewhere. It lists definitions based on how the word is used and similar words. I'm not suggesting you buy it, although I did, but they allow a single search for free. It's both a dictionary and a thesaurus at once. Give it a try.