Looking for readers and an editor

[Trombonus]

So after several days of "Too Damn Lazy to Get Off My Ass and Do Anything" syndrome, I finally finished my latest story. Now I'm hoping to get some people to read it and give me some feedback. I also need someone to edit it for me.

So it's the latest submission for the "Virtual Reality" chain, and is set in the Pokemon world. I know what you're thinking, but I can assure you that everyone in the story is of age, and no it's not some kiddy tale.

Most of the story is made up of Pokemon battles. I'm not worried about that part so much. What I am worried about is the sex scene. I have never been so frustrated and displeased with a sex scene that I wrote. I'm hoping you guys will let me know what you think. Also I'm not real happy with the ending.

Hope to hear from some of you.

 

[adetaildiva]

So after several days of "Too Damn Lazy to Get Off My Ass and Do Anything" syndrome, I finally finished my latest story. Now I'm hoping to get some people to read it and give me some feedback. I also need someone to edit it for me.

So it's the latest submission for the "Virtual Reality" chain, and is set in the Pokemon world. I know what you're thinking, but I can assure you that everyone in the story is of age, and no it's not some kiddy tale.

Most of the story is made up of Pokemon battles. I'm not worried about that part so much. What I am worried about is the sex scene. I have never been so frustrated and displeased with a sex scene that I wrote. I'm hoping you guys will let me know what you think. Also I'm not real happy with the ending.

Hope to hear from some of you.

If I had a clue what a Pokemon was &/or how they have sex, I might volunteer to help. The other thing making me hesitate is that you don't say how long this puppy is. Lastly, when do you need it back?

 

[Trombonus]

If I had a clue what a Pokemon was &/or how they have sex, I might volunteer to help. The other thing making me hesitate is that you don't say how long this puppy is. Lastly, when do you need it back?

Ah sorry about that. It's a little over 13 pages in Word. I'm not too worried about the Pokemon part, it's the sex part that I'm not thrilled with. Mostly I just need grammar help and maybe some feedback on the sex scene. Also I'm not in any rush. I mean I'd like to submit it as soon as I can, but I'm not picky.

 

[Katyusha]

So after several days of "Too Damn Lazy to Get Off My Ass and Do Anything" syndrome, I finally finished my latest story. Now I'm hoping to get some people to read it and give me some feedback. I also need someone to edit it for me.

I'll help, if you like.

 

[adetaildiva]

Ah sorry about that. It's a little over 13 pages in Word. I'm not too worried about the Pokemon part, it's the sex part that I'm not thrilled with. Mostly I just need grammar help and maybe some feedback on the sex scene. Also I'm not in any rush. I mean I'd like to submit it as soon as I can, but I'm not picky.

I think I can help if you're still looking for folks. Do you mind being in line behind TxRad? *joking*

I might even be able to do you both at the same .... nah, who'm I kidding. I'm good, but I'm not that good.

Okay, seriousness aside, I'll be happy to be either a reader or editor, whichever you'd prefer.

 

[Trombonus]

Thank you both. I'd love for you both to take a look at it. And diva, it would be great if you could help edit mine too. PM me your e-mails so I can send it to you.