Looking for reader/editor feedback - Loving Wife

[Daryl_Moore]

I have written a Loving Wife story that I would like some feedback on. My writing in the past has been for film so I may have some bad script habits.

I've put on my big boy pants so I'll take the feedback, hate you for it and then realize you had a point. Tell me if it engaged you, but more importantly if it failed and why. Did the characters and story work or did you think not this again. Please try to be constructive because I want to improve anywhere I can.

So if you are interested in reading: And Sammy Makes Three, let me know and I will arrange to get you the file.

Thanks,

Daryl

 

[r4444g]

Daryl, I would be willing to give you feedback on your story. If you'd like you can get two opinions for one, as my wife would also be open and giving you a female perspective but it is your choice obviously. Let me know if my offer is of interest. I usually check here once or twice a day.

Rick

 

[Daryl_Moore]

Thanks for the offer. I had several people look at the story and it was published https://www.literotica.com/beta/s/and-sammy-makes-three

Thanks.