Looking for inspiring editor/muse-incest

[stormyknight]

I have submitted only a handful of stories in the Incest category and have received reasonable reviews. I appreciate the constructive comments. I generally agree with the comments, and see a need for outside influence, having never utilized an editor before. The stories are presented in a style different from many others on Literotica. I am seeking another pair of eyes, not from a mechanical sense (spelling-grammar) but rather one who has a feel from a readers perspective. Someone who enjoys the basic story, but could offer advice or inspiration to bring a good story to a more captivating level for the reader.
Most of my stories don't really have endings, but rather, opportunities to evolve and expand.
If you enjoy reading and offering constructive comment, then I would be interested in sharing ideas and rough drafts with you. Peruse my submissions and reply at your convenience.

Regards, Stormy

 

[litmlove]

As I have learnt, people need a link to your profile
http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=667876&page=submissions

Here are my thoughts after reading some of your writing. Keep in mind I am not an experienced writer so I don't have all the answers for you.

• You need editorial help to get all those "missing word" type of errors
  
• The main problem with your writing is that the action&dialogue feels forced. A quick test for this is: "Is the dialogue/action only about the advancing the scene to the objective?" If so then it is forcing the story and that feels unnatural. Example:

  "I talked to Megan, so spare me the excuses and explanation. I don't want this to destroy our family, although it very likely could. Only time will tell. But just a part of me wants to know how this all happened. You owe me at least that much."

  That ranting-dialogue should have been expanded into a conservation between the husband and wife or made more obvious that she was ranting.
  
• You need to develop your characters' unique speaking voice. All characters tend to blend into one speaking voice which is confusing and uninteresting.
  
• With each story you are getting better as a writer.
  
• Good stories need tension and conflict. You are too quick to resolve every conflict/roadblock to go to the sex.
  
• Occasionally you skip through some of the action. This really jarring because I imagine the story as I read it.
  

• "Tears started streaming, and through quivering lips, ...

  This is a case where you could read a guide to eliminate bad words/phrases - 'started' is one of those words always needs to be eliminated because it is too nebulous. More importantly it does make much sense visually(its not that bad, just the best example i found with my quick read through)

You are not a bad writer. With a few tweaks here and there you could be brilliant.

 

[stormyknight]

Many thanks.

Thank you litmlove. Yes, I do need help with editing. I appreciate your constructive comments and have taken them to heart. Having another pair of eyes on a story and feedback to make the critical "tweaks" before submitting a story would indeed be helpful. I like to write, and more important, I hope the readers enjoy it as well.

Stormyknight