I posted before about my investigation story, and after i got some awesome ideas. I went ahead and began to write it. Now it's rough, so there will be errors, just wanna see if this prologue will make you want to read more, and if not give me some advice on how to make it better. This story has no title yet.
Prologue:Three missing women.
The wedding was being held outside, in the October temperature, but it was nice, Annabella’s wedding was to be perfect, she was marrying the man of her dreams out by the light house near her daddy’s farm on the island of Monhegan Maine. It was coming down to the hour of the ceremony and Annabella’s sister Maria was missing as well as her two bride’s maids; Alison and Rebeca. When she thought about exactly when she last saw them, she realized they were suppose to head in to town to grab last minuet flowers from the florist, but never made any notice of leaving or coming back. Annabella wasn’t going to have her wedding with out three people, she would not stand for it; everyone dropped their tasks and went scouting for the three women...
Maria, Rebeca and Alison were murdered that night, the preacher and his wife made their way behind the alter to look for the girls and not even four steps in to the woods did they find their mangled bodies. Police were called in and they investigated the scene further, Annabella was in a catatonic state after they told her, the three were drained of blood and their organs were replaced. If this report wasn’t bad enough days later, the same type of murder was once again reported, this time it was tourists were found dead with the same type of lacerations, no blood or organs even some limbs were missing. Many of the locals no longer felt safe on their rock, and even decided to get hotels on the main land until the investigation is solved.
At this point, it was categorized as serial killings and the local police couldn’t handle it alone as law states, if it goes beyond just first degree murder the FBI must get involved, they also were afraid these killings might be apart of a bigger scandal so they had no choice but to call in additional help. When the police made the call in to agents there, they never expected the Bureau would send two people who would unearth more about the island town then most knew
about...
Prologue:Three missing women.
The wedding was being held outside, in the October temperature, but it was nice, Annabella’s wedding was to be perfect, she was marrying the man of her dreams out by the light house near her daddy’s farm on the island of Monhegan Maine. It was coming down to the hour of the ceremony and Annabella’s sister Maria was missing as well as her two bride’s maids; Alison and Rebeca. When she thought about exactly when she last saw them, she realized they were suppose to head in to town to grab last minuet flowers from the florist, but never made any notice of leaving or coming back. Annabella wasn’t going to have her wedding with out three people, she would not stand for it; everyone dropped their tasks and went scouting for the three women...
Maria, Rebeca and Alison were murdered that night, the preacher and his wife made their way behind the alter to look for the girls and not even four steps in to the woods did they find their mangled bodies. Police were called in and they investigated the scene further, Annabella was in a catatonic state after they told her, the three were drained of blood and their organs were replaced. If this report wasn’t bad enough days later, the same type of murder was once again reported, this time it was tourists were found dead with the same type of lacerations, no blood or organs even some limbs were missing. Many of the locals no longer felt safe on their rock, and even decided to get hotels on the main land until the investigation is solved.
At this point, it was categorized as serial killings and the local police couldn’t handle it alone as law states, if it goes beyond just first degree murder the FBI must get involved, they also were afraid these killings might be apart of a bigger scandal so they had no choice but to call in additional help. When the police made the call in to agents there, they never expected the Bureau would send two people who would unearth more about the island town then most knew
about...
