looking for feedback

[mikeaday]

im looking for constructive feedback on my stories. please read them only if you are comfortable with the section they are posted in.

i would appriciate comments on either character devolvement or how the stories can be improved.

if you hate the story please say why and not just saying that its stupid.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=1070022&page=submissions

above is a link to my submissions page and you can see the catogories that the stories are posted in there

 

[mikeaday]

just posted a new story, it is in the non-consent section and was done as a request, i would appriciate any feedback
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=422578

 

[HeyAll]

i thought it was pretty good