Looking for feedback

[ColoradoRon]

I just recently had my first story published on this site:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=27354

I would appreciate any feedback. I am currently writing another story with the same characters.

Your comments are extremely welcome.

This is fun stuff!!!

 

[lovetoread]

Wonderful story,voted, and will recommend it. I loved the dildo part.....