soulhouse
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- Mar 24, 2019
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I'd love to get some feedback on my first story (in 3 parts of 6,000, 6,500 and 8,500 words respectively), "Fucked Stupid", particularly since reader comments are so few and far between: Fucked Stupid
It's ostensibly a mind control story, but I wonder now if I should have filed it under non-consent/reluctance. It certainly isn't about hypnosis or the like, but most definitely is a fantasy of control, or more precisely of being controlled. Fundamentally, for me, it's about surrendering to seduction though, and stories of male sexual violence revolt me, so I'd hate to associate it with that. I'd be interested to know anyone's thoughts, and whether it might have been read more or less or received differently, were it in the non-consent/reluctance category.
The first part is a pretty straightforward sex fantasy, but I tried to work much harder on the story in parts 2 and 3, so I hope it improved for that. I also hope I did a little more showing than telling as I went along, but I doubt I have the hang of that yet.
It's ostensibly a mind control story, but I wonder now if I should have filed it under non-consent/reluctance. It certainly isn't about hypnosis or the like, but most definitely is a fantasy of control, or more precisely of being controlled. Fundamentally, for me, it's about surrendering to seduction though, and stories of male sexual violence revolt me, so I'd hate to associate it with that. I'd be interested to know anyone's thoughts, and whether it might have been read more or less or received differently, were it in the non-consent/reluctance category.
The first part is a pretty straightforward sex fantasy, but I tried to work much harder on the story in parts 2 and 3, so I hope it improved for that. I also hope I did a little more showing than telling as I went along, but I doubt I have the hang of that yet.