GoodBoy741
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Torg
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There's nothing wrong with those two threads, though I wonder how you'll get him out of this predicament.
I've seen much darker. MUCH darker.
GoodBoy741
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Okay.
My thinking was that with most of the mind control stories, the person being MCed is made to enjoy the activity on some level. I believe that's even one of the CHYOO guidelines. By having her "wake up" more or less and remember what happened, someone could interpret that as being a little more rapey than it should be. I'm glad it doesn't come off that way to you, Torg.
As for getting out of it, that's the fun. I thought I'd leave this thread up for awhile and see if anyone else wants to write something explaining how he works this out, but eventually I'll post my own idea. Part of the fun of having limitations is working around them. Plus, I did this because I wanted an encounter that took longer than a single thread and had some consequences. I think it will help separate this part of the story from the other parts.
Oh, and the original version that I wrote up involved sex. Once I wrote her panicing about what had happened, I went back and took the sex out. I figured that would make it less bad by making her do less that she wouldn't want to do normally.
My thinking was that with most of the mind control stories, the person being MCed is made to enjoy the activity on some level. I believe that's even one of the CHYOO guidelines. By having her "wake up" more or less and remember what happened, someone could interpret that as being a little more rapey than it should be. I'm glad it doesn't come off that way to you, Torg.
As for getting out of it, that's the fun. I thought I'd leave this thread up for awhile and see if anyone else wants to write something explaining how he works this out, but eventually I'll post my own idea. Part of the fun of having limitations is working around them. Plus, I did this because I wanted an encounter that took longer than a single thread and had some consequences. I think it will help separate this part of the story from the other parts.
Oh, and the original version that I wrote up involved sex. Once I wrote her panicing about what had happened, I went back and took the sex out. I figured that would make it less bad by making her do less that she wouldn't want to do normally.
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RicoLouis
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I like the concept of the fact that a mind controler has flaws or hasn't fully gained control of his abilities. Makes it a little more intresting the the normal mundane mc stories i have read. The only thing I didn't like was the lack of detail in whats going on. Seems a little rushed. The strip tease was one line long and the sex was maybe four.
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That's a good point. I originally intended it to be one thread instead of two. So I was trying to keep it short so it wouldn't be one super long thread. It would be better with a little more detail.
Edit: Okay, I went back and added a bit more. It seems a little odd to change a thread after people have already read it, but I don't think people will mind.
Edit: Okay, I went back and added a bit more. It seems a little odd to change a thread after people have already read it, but I don't think people will mind.
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