Looking for feedback for the first part of the Rinessa Saga

[krojar]

Hi folks! First story put up on Literotica so I'd love some feedback. It's in four parts:

http://www.literotica.com/s/the-red-scourge-ch-01
http://www.literotica.com/s/the-red-scourge-ch-02
http://www.literotica.com/s/the-red-scourge-ch-03
http://www.literotica.com/s/the-red-scourge-ch-04

Thanks!