Looking for feedback for BDSM story

[Binah]

I am writing a chapter series that is set in a modern but nostalgic BDSM atmosphere. It is mostly heterosexual but has bisexual elements as well. I would love to know what you honestly think. Constructive criticism is very important to me and I appreciate it greatly. Click the cover to "Underworld" and let me know what you think.

 

[DevilOrAngel]

Excellent beginning to your series Only confusing part that i tripped over must of been just typo. I just included it in the post so you know where and what I meant. Can't wait to see what happens

She wore a fucking cowboy hat, and those crocodile skin boots, jeans so tight she might bust out of them, and that black tank top she always wore (must have twenty of them!) that made her seem Absolutely not. Art man and part woman.

 

[Binah]

Excellent beginning to your series Only confusing part that i tripped over must of been just typo. I just included it in the post so you know where and what I meant. Can't wait to see what happens

She wore a fucking cowboy hat, and those crocodile skin boots, jeans so tight she might bust out of them, and that black tank top she always wore (must have twenty of them!) that made her seem Absolutely not. Art man and part woman.

Spellchecker messed that one up. It should be Part man, part woman. Thank you for the feedback, it helps me very much.