Looking for an editor.

[a_bent_ampersand]

Okie:

Maybe I was too cute with my last request and tried to separate my request from the strings of other requests, but mine has been barely read and I've earned not one response... so...

Yes I'm looking for an editor for my stories that can be found here:
Deleted per Literotica Forum Guidelines

The stories are posted under incest/taboo and are not for the faint of heart.

The pressing matter is that I have a new chapter I would like to submit for posting soon and would very much like an editor's input before I send it in. I would encourage you to read one of the other stories (any one) and use the 'contact' tab on my stories profile if you have interest.

Thank you for your time and attention.

a.bent&

 

[_Lynn_]

It might just be due to the fact that those of us checking in here are swamped with edits right now.
I'm so far behind I haven't even had time to write for a week.

 

[a_bent_ampersand]

my other post

but the other post was cute, right?

 

[_Lynn_]

It might have been, but to tell the truth, when I noticed 'grammer' I shook my head.

 

[a_bent_ampersand]

My grammer... mmar...?

I think for the most part it's not so bad. I think I rock that area right in the middle where I'm not published in science journals, but light years ahead of grammar school. And yeah, I do typo. I re-read and switch a your to a you're. I'm doing my best.

And I'm checking out the homework in the how-to's. Some stuff I know. Some stuff completely floors me. What's the trouble with ellipses exactly? Saw that a how-to had a big nasty letter to the ellipse because it's related to chatting? I use ellipses to build pauses in my sex talk (beats) (breath) make it easier on the eyes, I think?

But now I see that most people are annoyed by that and VE's are especially put off by its usage?

Here's a snippet of dialogue from my new piece (out of context) how do I re-write it to seem more appropriate and more pleasing to the grammer --ack grammar sniffers? Please help?

She says this while having sex:

"You’re big and all, but these guys make a girl cum… oh fuck… I get so weak in the knees while they do me… my eyes are usually closed 'cause they feel so awesome… I get these flutters in my chest –under my tits, while they plow me…”

I hope you can see I'm trying to build beats into the pacing and I use a dash for her to interrupt her word chest. What is the alternative everyone wants to see? Your advice will be greatly appreciated and I will apply what I learn to my next post.

Thanks!

Also, here is the link to my stories here. I'm still looking for an editor.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=967975&page=submissions

I've also turned my PMing on. I love the Internet.

abent&

 

[Moralez18PT]

It might have been, but to tell the truth, when I noticed 'grammer' I shook my head.

I was this close to mentioning that... but I thought I was going too far.
Editing or editting quickly followed by a grammer made me lol

 

[snoopercharmbrights]

... What's the trouble with ellipses exactly? Saw that a how-to had a big nasty letter to the ellipse because it's related to chatting? I use ellipses to build pauses in my sex talk (beats) (breath) make it easier on the eyes, I think?

But now I see that most people are annoyed by that and VE's are especially put off by its usage? ...

Please do not confuse one "How To" article by one VE with the general opinion of other VEs.

I cannot speak for any other VE but I do allow the use of the ellipsis to indicate a pause in the middle of a speech, especially as Merriam-Webster endorses it:

Merriam-Webster
ELLIPSIS
1 a: the omission of one or more words that are obviously understood but that must be supplied to make a construction grammatically complete
b: a sudden leap from one topic to another
2: marks or a mark (as …) indicating an omission (as of words) or a pause.

(My colour.)

 

[a_bent_ampersand]

Apologies, Sir. Glad to hear the ellipse is alive and well.

Please do not confuse one "How To" article by one VE with the general opinion of other VEs.

I cannot speak for any other VE but I do allow the use of the ellipsis to indicate a pause in the middle of a speech, especially as Merriam-Webster endorses it:
(My colour.)

Done I hereby renounce the general opinion of ellipses that I read in a how to and hereby undertake to never partake of such slander in the future. I regret any grief this has caused you or your family and wish you the very best.

I am still without an editor If there are any takers, I encourage you to contact me using the instructions on either of the two threads I've started here quite by random happenstance.

I do appreciate the somewhat strained offer two posts up, but, my friend, rather than strain you with a work that you are not a fan of, I will continue to chuck away at my overtly long piece using the guidance and encouragement that has been handed me so far.

All of that said. Happy to hear ellipses are okay by some. But I've already taken them out. Trying my best not to use adverbs as advised.

Also. Grammar does have a correct spelling. Internet told me so.

*hugs*

abent& out