Looking for an editor

[Momasboy17404]

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I am a young guy looking to write some real life experiences. This does involve some incest. I confided these stories to my girl friend and it really got her excited. She evidently has been an avid reader of this site and told me I should post my real life stories.

I am in college but my grammer is as my english lit professor says "wanting" So instead of posting crap I would like for somebody with the skills to polish it up without changing the story.

Any volunteers

P.S. If you a dude just looking for pics of my mom or a hook up with my mom please go away. I am from the Amish country and I will put a hex on you. HAHA

 

[AsylumSeeker]

Hex-Resistant Editor Willing To Help

Hex-on! Or other things. I am willing to edit. It will be a few days as I'm leaving the wife on business travel. It would be mid-week. The choice is yours.

AS

 

[CopyCarver]

Hex-on! Or other things. I am willing to edit. It will be a few days as I'm leaving the wife on business travel. It would be mid-week. The choice is yours.

AS

Oh, Oh! If you hear the dreaded "clip-clop, bang-bang," hit the dirt fast!

 

[Momasboy17404]

SHOOT ME NOW !!!!!!. MY Word program is corrupted so I am now in the process of rewritting this thing.

Luckily it is a true story so it much easier to write.

I do have a question though. I have only written stories in a first person narrative style. I have never written in a style that reflects a conversation. Is narrative type stories acceptable?

I guess I am not just looking for an editor but some critisim. I want to be able to tell these stories in a way that will be as hot as what happened without changing the facts since they are true stories.

I am in no way an author I just want to be able to share my true stories. The funny part about my stories is truth is really stranger then fiction.

 

[snooper]

... I have only written stories in a first person narrative style. I have never written in a style that reflects a conversation. Is narrative type stories acceptable? ...

That depends what you mean by 'acceptable'. There are plenty of them on Literotica, so it is acceptable to the powers-that-be.

At a personal opinion level, some of the habitués of this forum may recognise the following thoughts:-
In general, first person narratives are limiting. Most males find it difficult to read female narratives, so that’s nearly half your readers lost. Old people such as I find it difficult to imagine themselves as young again, and even more so, young people just cannot imagine what it is like to be old.
In general narratives addressed to a second person reader are limiting. Most females find it difficult to accept narratives addressed directly to males, so that’s nearly half your readers lost.

 

[cloudy]

I do have a question though. I have only written stories in a first person narrative style. I have never written in a style that reflects a conversation. Is narrative type stories acceptable?

"But, dialogue is important," she said.

The neophyte thought about it a moment, then asked, "Why?"

"Because it draws people into the story more than just relating what was said. It feels more real; more like the reader is there with you."

 

[Momasboy17404]

Thankyou for the imput. I guess I need to revise my story. Though altering the narrative is drffinatly taking creative liscense bacause I assuradly do not recall what was stated in a conversation when I was twelve. However, I do see how it would spice up the story.

I also think I need to shorten the story some after rereading it. Though the long winded narratives do set up the actual events and I think make the story more real as far as the reader understanding what or how the sex come to be, I am starting to sound more Like a Waltons Episode and I dont want to loose the reader

When I confided these events to my current girl friend who is much older then myself she got so excited that she orgasmed as we laid in bed to my narrative. We laid there and I whispered what happened in her ear so afraid that I would be overheard though there was nobody but us in her place.

My narratives make her so excited that it has almost replaced foreplay. I guess this is the type of thing I am trying to put on paper for the reader. I want them to react like she does. HMmmmm, maybe I should do audio stories however I would just die if somebody recognized my voice. I am told by girls that my deep voice and laughter is very sexy. However, I dont want to loose the male audience.

Man this is getting harder then I thought it was gonna be. Makes me more appreciative of writers now that is for sure.

 

[CopyCarver]

Lack of dialogue also makes it far more difficult to "show, not tell." Like all rules, this one can be broken--Hemingway did it well in his "Nick Adams" stories--but it's tough to pull off. As a beginner, you'll probably find it much easier to create some dialogue than to write around it.

 

[cloudy]

Thankyou for the imput. I guess I need to revise my story. Though altering the narrative is drffinatly taking creative liscense bacause I assuradly do not recall what was stated in a conversation when I was twelve. However, I do see how it would spice up the story.

It's a story, it doesn't have to be exact, even though you're writing it from experience. All stories are written with the writer's experiences coloring it. That's what writers do.

I also think I need to shorten the story some after rereading it. Though the long winded narratives do set up the actual events and I think make the story more real as far as the reader understanding what or how the sex come to be, I am starting to sound more Like a Waltons Episode and I dont want to loose the reader

It's much more effective to have backstory come out in bits and pieces than in a long-winded set-up before the actual story begins. You'll lose readers in droves if there's not something at the very beginning to grab their interest. And honestly? Sometimes backstory isn't nearly as important as we think it is. Remember, it may be a real experience, but to your readers, it's still a story.

When I confided these events to my current girl friend who is much older then myself she got so excited that she orgasmed as we laid in bed to my narrative. We laid there and I whispered what happened in her ear so afraid that I would be overheard though there was nobody but us in her place.

Yes. Reread my comment above. That's why hooking your reader in is so important.

 

[Momasboy17404]

Thx so much for your imput. Gives me much to think about as I try to rewite this. Im not sure that my GF understands the absolute work she has given me in writing this.

My professers claim I am a very dynamic speaker even with my particular homespun vunacular But I find writing so hard. In my speaking courses I never really prepare. I prefer to speak off the cuff as they say. So your tips are extremely helpful.