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I am posting a story below. If any editor is interested in it please drop me a note. I look forword to hearing from you.

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Remembering


He sits on his couch waiting for her. He is naked. His cock is in his hand. He looks at the clock and sighs. Too many hours. He starts to think of their last encounter. The animalistic way she took him. Ripping off her panties, riding his cock so hard and so fast. She gripped him so tight, sliding up and down. His hand starts to move over his cock. He is getting hard. He grips it and gives it a squeeze. Damn he loves the way she gets his mind racing. Nobody gets his cock harder. Nobody gives him such an explosive orgasm. She left him hard last time. He had to use her panties to finish himself off. He came so hard last time he had to actually have a nap. His hand starts to rub his cock harder. Pumping it slowly as it grows. He closes his eyes and pictures her. Naked. Staring at him. Licking her lips, touching her body. His hand starts to grip a little tighter. He is stroking without thinking now. The first of the precome is leaking. He uses it. His cock is hard now, shiny from his own excitement. His head is leaning back and his hand pumps slowly up and down his hard cock. A sigh escapes his lips. He is picturing her, walking toward him. That look on her face. She eyes him with lust. His hand is working faster. His breath is speeding up. A groan escapes his lips. She is walking closer to him. Touching herself. Running her hands down her breasts to her belly. Getting closer. Her hands drop to her neatly kept pussy, she runs her hand over it. Smiling at him, a moan comes from her lips freely. She takes her fingers and sucks them. His cock is throbbing. His hand is gripping him tight. He is pumping it up and down. Breathing heavy. He needs her, he wants her, he craves her. His moaning is increasing. She is getting so close. He wants to feel her touch. She had dropped to her hands and knees and is crawling over to him. Heading straight for his cock. Licking her lips, her eyes lock onto his and she keeps crawling. She gets inches from his cock and opens her mouth, she will devour him, take him deep. Suck him hard. Make him come then do it all over again. Fucking and sucking and teasing him all night. He lets out a LOUD moan and COMES hard. Shooting cum all over his hand and cock and body. He keeps stroking till its over. His body shaking. He opens his eyes. The room is empty. He eyes the clock. Too many hours.


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If this interests you and you want to possibly work with me drop me an email.

Arhapsodist @ hotmail.com

Grifters
 
Grifters said:
I am posting a story below. If any editor is interested in it please drop me a note. ...
A few comments:

455 words is too short for Literotica.

67 'sentences' of which almost a quarter have no main verb.

No characterisation, no location, no plot.

Spelling was good, though.
 
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Couple of things also.

I knew it was too short, I just didnt wanna post a huge thread with one of my bigger stories. As for the other stuff I can work on that. The story was a stream of thoughts which is why it jumps all over the place.

But thanks for the comments. I never mind them.
 
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