Looking for an Editor for a M/S mindcontrol story

[Sociopathstoryteller]

Looking for an Editor for a M/S mind control story

Hello,

I'm a new writer looking for an editor. It's a Mom/Son mind control story. I have three chapters done, totaling about 10,000 words. It's on the meaner side (but not horrid) and a slow burn.

Any help would be greatly appreciated.

 

[ThisNameIsntTakenYet]

I'm assuming the son is doing the mind-controlling on the mother? Or the other way around? And how is this accomplished? Hypnosis, a drug, some kind of magical/psychic power, etc. I might be interested but I want to know a few more details first.

 

[Sociopathstoryteller]

The son is doing the mind control. Mechanism is Nanites, although it's never explicitly stated. The story influenced by "Remomdified", "5 Easy Installments", and "A New Career" if you've ever read them. (If you haven't read those stories but like the genre, I highly recommended them).

Perspective is first person from the son's point of view, although the first scene is from that of his handler: The reasoning behind that being that I felt 8,000 words before the first sex scene was asking too much from the audience.

The basic premise is a shady company is searching for field agents, and they are testing the "protagonist" out. The kid (18) starts off a bit of a twisted and gets more corrupt as the story continues.

He gets a mystery liquid to dose his mom. It allows him to issue 3 orders a day that are not overly objectionable to his mother's moral state, but it also has the ability allow him to suggest to / push things into her subconscious, altering her mindset. So he spends each chapter adjusting her more and more.

It requires a slow delve into turning her into his plaything.

 

[ThisNameIsntTakenYet]

Sounds interesting, I've sent you a PM.