looking for an author to flesh out a story

Parascuba

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I have the basics of a story that I would like an author to flesh out with some realistic sounding details.
The basics are as follows:-
Two families are heading to the continent in their caravans.
One family are a retired couple Jim and Anne, he is hoping for a late fling, she is reserved and hard to persuade into anything outside monogamous relations and not too keen on giving oral.
The other family is Geoff (50) vasectomised, easy going. His wife Cheryl (37), Thier son Don (18), and daughter Issy (18). The daughter is only with them because her boyfriend dumped her. Don't has matured early and is hitting on his mum who is having a hard time avoiding the inevitable. Cheryl is getting broody as her biological clock is ticking. Geoff and Cheryl have discussed this and as Geoff is unable to impregnate her he wants her to try to get another man to give her the child they want.
The two couples have got to know each other well and dance with each other's partners in the evenings. One evening Cheryl and Anne go to the toilets together and whilst they are gone, Geoff tells Jim that they have two problems, one Cheryl would like Jim to give her a child and two that they both want Anne to show Don how to treat a woman and make love to her. Jim explains to Geoff that unless Anne is receptive, there is no way that he, Jim, can think of fucking Anne and unless Cheryl can be persuasive, Anne will run a mile before thinking of another man taking her. But that if she does agree, Jim will suggest that Geoff accompanies them as a chaperone in case Don gets out of control. If it all goes down Jim wants Geoff to set up a GoPro to record the action. Meanwhile Cheryl outlines her fears to Anne. She explains that Don is getting insistent and rubbing his cock against her at every chance. She then pleads with Anne to take him to bed and teach him in the ways of lovemaking. Anne says that she needs to talk it through with Jim. Anne then throws the bombshell that she wants another baby and as Geoff is incapable of doing it and so would Anne let Jim do her. The other possibilities are Issy comes back after a frustrating evening to discover Jim banging Cheryl and gets aroused. When Geoff is chaperone ingredients Don & Anne, he stops Don and says he needs to show him how it is done (I hope Anne doesn''t mind) and once he arouses her it is obvious she doesn't. In the morning Anne has taken Geoff 3 times during the night and Don many times. She has taken Geoff in her mouth, something she has never done before because she always felt spermicide would be horrible. Both Cheryl and Issy will end up pregnant.
 
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Thier son Don (16),

DANGER, WILL ROBINSON!

No characters under eighteen allowed if there is any hint of sexuality involved with them. And you've got plenty. Age him up a bit or you have a no-go.

(you might also want to review the rules regarding there/their/they're)
 
Don's age updated to 18

The age constraint seems strange as in other areas it is quite acceptable to take women without consent (rape?). But hey, if that is the only perceived problem with my scenario then Don has just aged 2 years and is now 18 (takes a bit of the innocence and young inquisitiveness out of the mix), but hopefully that makes more authors comfortable with the seeds of the story.
I'm surprised 'predictive text' didn't pick up my incorrect spelling of their, given that it substituted incorrect words in other parts of the submission ('Don't' in place of Don,
And the sentence 'When Geoff is chaperone ingredients Anne and Don' should have read 'When Geoff is chaperoning Anne and Don').
 
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