Looking for a proofreader in the next few hours

[MetaBob]

I started a new piece last weekend and I'm looking for a proofreader for typos and such for its first chapter, which is 4478 words (of about 20K words total, and counting). I'm looking for a quick turnaround because I'm anxious to share this, I think it's really fun, I hope to submit this first chapter today, and on my last review I didn't see anything I wanted to change, so I'm ready for a fresh pair of eyes.

Key info:

Book title: Senioritis
Chapter title: 1. Matriculation
Chapter category: Anal (really just analingus). Later chapter categories are more likely to be BDSM and Mind Control
Tags: Muscular woman, Female Dominant, Consensual, Big breasts, Edging, Facesitting, Deep throat, Analingus, Female orgasm, Legs

The first three paragraphs:

"I'm 19," Nia said. She stretched her long strong left arm to the headboard, her longer stronger powerfully muscled right leg behind, round compact sculpted ass high, back arching, big warm sticky-damp breasts on my chest, her eyes closed, wavy auburn hair in a ponytail with a band around it every 9 inches or so to one side of her neck and brushing my shoulder. A warrior's ponytail.

19 was younger than I'd guessed but I certainly wanted to believe it -- the spectacular view and extreme burning afterglow from what she'd done to me 10 minutes earlier made me want to believe everything she said. She drew her limbs back and looked deep into my eyes, then switched arms and legs and stretched again, breasts dipping to rest on me, holding the pose and even extending it for at least 30 seconds. I could feel myself stirring. Not fully, just the beginnings.

"High school sucked," she said.

Note that as demonstrated here, I sometimes purposely omit commas between strings of adjectives, among other stylistic idiosyncracies. Anyone game to look past those idiosyncracies for any typos, misspellings, word omissions, wrong words or similar goofs that have evaded me? I'm willing to consider specific changes even in the case where I consider parts of my writing creatively idiosyncratic rather than unforgivably ungrammatical the way some here can. It'll probably be a month or three before any later chapters follow -- I'd prefer to draft the whole piece before I release anything after this chapter.

 

[MetaBob]

Never mind.

My currently altered mental state confirms: the first chapter isn't ready ... it needs significant thatching, ideally after sitting for weeks or months between multiple critical self-reviews, ideally from more than one mental state. I'll submit another chapter to another work to fulfill my self-imposed weekly obligation here instead.

The good news (for some)? My usual process works. Accelerating that process does not. Good (for me) to know.
The bad? I only have two more chapters from previously drafted and thoroughly self-reviewed works left in my quiver. I will review one of them (again) next.
The good news (for others)? I only have two more chapters from previously drafted and thoroughly self-reviewed works in my quiver.

 

[MetaBob]

Alternate chapter submitted

I found a dozen things in my several-months-old but previously unsubmitted chapter from an unfinished work that I thought needed change, all one- or two-word alterations or removal of excess commas. It'd been weeks since I last read it. If that's all I could find, life is good (for me). Others might disagree. That new chapter should be up within 2-3 days (unless Laurel has an issue). I'm done with this thread ... many thanks for all help offered.

Note: This new chapter is the first thing I've submitted here that hadn't been previously submitted (and published, of course) anywhere else. It gets a little intense, a thing that sometimes happens in my writing, the next (book-concluding) chapter even more so. C'est la vie.

Best to all,
-MɛtaBob

 

[MetaBob]

I finally submitted Senioritis

Chapter 1 was posted last weekend, chapter 2 is submitted and should be posted soon.

I haven't actually finished the book ... I have what I think is 12 solid chapters with good progress made on ch13 and a brief concluding ch14 outlined, plus Book 2 in rough outline with ideas still coalescing for Book 3.

A couple people offered to edit but begged off, so as is the case for most of my stuff, this is all me.