I'm looking for a editor for chapter 2 of my story The Size Formula v1.2 http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=117064
Where I need the most help is in punching up the sex in the story.
Here is a bit of chapter 2.
It was Sunday night and like all unattached single men it was time to do my laundry. Lucky for me my apartment building had a laundry room. The only clean cloths that I had were an old pair of sweat paints and old t-shirt. I put on the old t-shirt and sweat pants. The sweat pants were a very tight fit. My newly upgraded equipment did not fit. To make more room I moved my cock shaft down the right leg of my sweat pants. I arrived at the laundry room to find no one there and one open washing machine. Like most guys I only need one. I tossed my clothing in to the open washing machine whites, darks and all.
With nothing better to do I sat down in a chair in the laundry room and started to read the news paper. One of the dryers shuts down and like clock work a girl enters the laundry room and starts to unload the dryer. Wow she looks very hot. She looks to be about 25 years old with blond hair and blue eyes and she also has a huge rack. I think she had some work done on theses babies because she has on a t-shit no bra and the girls have no droop in them at all. She starts to fold her cloths on a table facing me. I tell he hello. She looks up at me and tell me hello.
I continue to read my paper but I note she seem to be staring at me. Then she tells me “What do you have stuffed in those pants” I tell her just me. She tells me “I have seen guy put socks down there shorts to make it look bigger, but you look too big to be real. I tell her that its real and she should see it when it’s hard! She said “bull shit” and walk up to me and takes hold of my cock threw my sweat pants. Using both of her hands she checks out my cock. She said “Wow it is real. Real huge and you are still soft.” I won’t be soft for long if you keep using your hands like that. She then told me that her name was Wendy and invited me up to her apartment when I was done with my laundry. I completed my laundry as quickly I could. It was hard to keep my mind on folding cloths and off Wendy’s hot body.
I returned to my apartment and changed into some nicer clothing and headed to Wendy’s apartment. Wendy greeted me at the door. She was in the same outfit she had on in the laundry room. She leads in to her couch and asks me if I wanted a beer. We sit on the couch chatting about are jobs and families. She tells me she 27 years old and she works as a Lawyer. We joke about her calling me out in the laundry room. I tell her that her boobs look at bit to good to be totally real. She tells me “They are real. Real expensive” We laugh and she tell me her mom bought her a boob job when she graduated from law school. She gets up and removes her t-shirt. She asks me “What do you think of them?” I tell her that her breasts are by far the best I have ever seen. I ask her if I could touch them. She tells me “Yes Please”. I slowly massage her huge breasts her nipples get hard and I start to suck on her erect nipples. Wendy seems to like her huge boobs sucked.
Wendy tells me “I showed you mine it’s time for you to show me yours”.
Where I need the most help is in punching up the sex in the story.
Here is a bit of chapter 2.
It was Sunday night and like all unattached single men it was time to do my laundry. Lucky for me my apartment building had a laundry room. The only clean cloths that I had were an old pair of sweat paints and old t-shirt. I put on the old t-shirt and sweat pants. The sweat pants were a very tight fit. My newly upgraded equipment did not fit. To make more room I moved my cock shaft down the right leg of my sweat pants. I arrived at the laundry room to find no one there and one open washing machine. Like most guys I only need one. I tossed my clothing in to the open washing machine whites, darks and all.
With nothing better to do I sat down in a chair in the laundry room and started to read the news paper. One of the dryers shuts down and like clock work a girl enters the laundry room and starts to unload the dryer. Wow she looks very hot. She looks to be about 25 years old with blond hair and blue eyes and she also has a huge rack. I think she had some work done on theses babies because she has on a t-shit no bra and the girls have no droop in them at all. She starts to fold her cloths on a table facing me. I tell he hello. She looks up at me and tell me hello.
I continue to read my paper but I note she seem to be staring at me. Then she tells me “What do you have stuffed in those pants” I tell her just me. She tells me “I have seen guy put socks down there shorts to make it look bigger, but you look too big to be real. I tell her that its real and she should see it when it’s hard! She said “bull shit” and walk up to me and takes hold of my cock threw my sweat pants. Using both of her hands she checks out my cock. She said “Wow it is real. Real huge and you are still soft.” I won’t be soft for long if you keep using your hands like that. She then told me that her name was Wendy and invited me up to her apartment when I was done with my laundry. I completed my laundry as quickly I could. It was hard to keep my mind on folding cloths and off Wendy’s hot body.
I returned to my apartment and changed into some nicer clothing and headed to Wendy’s apartment. Wendy greeted me at the door. She was in the same outfit she had on in the laundry room. She leads in to her couch and asks me if I wanted a beer. We sit on the couch chatting about are jobs and families. She tells me she 27 years old and she works as a Lawyer. We joke about her calling me out in the laundry room. I tell her that her boobs look at bit to good to be totally real. She tells me “They are real. Real expensive” We laugh and she tell me her mom bought her a boob job when she graduated from law school. She gets up and removes her t-shirt. She asks me “What do you think of them?” I tell her that her breasts are by far the best I have ever seen. I ask her if I could touch them. She tells me “Yes Please”. I slowly massage her huge breasts her nipples get hard and I start to suck on her erect nipples. Wendy seems to like her huge boobs sucked.
Wendy tells me “I showed you mine it’s time for you to show me yours”.
