Midwest Writer
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- Feb 20, 2004
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To all:
I wrote a four page story for a friend last night. The story begins as below. The story moves onto going to her apartment and her giving a sexy bj and he goes down on her. After they both cum they fall asleepin each other's arms.
So I'm wondering what people think of the opening five graphs. Does it grab you? Would you want to continue. I can furnish the whole story to anyone interested.
Thanks,
Midwest Writer
Long Night’s Travel Into Love
John knew it would be a long night – perhaps dangerous as well. He shifted the VW into drive and moved into traffic. The traffic on Clark Street was heavy for 9 PM on Thursday night. He had to stop suddenly for a kid running against a traffic light. John thought to himself – “great all I need to do is hit a kid and my night is over. I have better things to do tonight.”
He was going to Marti’s house. It was a meeting he both longed for and dreaded. Ever since he had expressed his love for her she had been cool to him. He thought, “What did I do wrong?”
Marti was a wonderful woman. She was 35, elegantly small breasted, tanned, trim on a statuesque body. Marti hair was a golden brown. Her eyes were a piercing blue. Her breasts filled out nicely her clothes. The 32 A breast had provided John many hours of pleasure in the past.
He remembered their last love making session where Marti had appeared nude at an afternoon get together with some friends. She was fully shaved and so pretty. She had walked out of the bedroom into the living room of people dressed in bikinis and shorts on a hot summer afternoon.
Marti had said, “Hi. I hope my dress is alright for this crowd?”
I wrote a four page story for a friend last night. The story begins as below. The story moves onto going to her apartment and her giving a sexy bj and he goes down on her. After they both cum they fall asleepin each other's arms.
So I'm wondering what people think of the opening five graphs. Does it grab you? Would you want to continue. I can furnish the whole story to anyone interested.
Thanks,
Midwest Writer
Long Night’s Travel Into Love
John knew it would be a long night – perhaps dangerous as well. He shifted the VW into drive and moved into traffic. The traffic on Clark Street was heavy for 9 PM on Thursday night. He had to stop suddenly for a kid running against a traffic light. John thought to himself – “great all I need to do is hit a kid and my night is over. I have better things to do tonight.”
He was going to Marti’s house. It was a meeting he both longed for and dreaded. Ever since he had expressed his love for her she had been cool to him. He thought, “What did I do wrong?”
Marti was a wonderful woman. She was 35, elegantly small breasted, tanned, trim on a statuesque body. Marti hair was a golden brown. Her eyes were a piercing blue. Her breasts filled out nicely her clothes. The 32 A breast had provided John many hours of pleasure in the past.
He remembered their last love making session where Marti had appeared nude at an afternoon get together with some friends. She was fully shaved and so pretty. She had walked out of the bedroom into the living room of people dressed in bikinis and shorts on a hot summer afternoon.
Marti had said, “Hi. I hope my dress is alright for this crowd?”
