Literary Vocalizations

[Antfarmer77]

Ok, I'm in the process of rewrite X4. How do you all write vocalizations (i.e.
screams, shrieks, orgasms etc.) I haven't figure out exactally what Lit. dosen't like about my story but they're down to five days for a rejection LOL
But I'll get it eventually, hopefully

 

[Selena_Kitt]

Ok, I'm in the process of rewrite X4. How do you all write vocalizations (i.e.
screams, shrieks, orgasms etc.) I haven't figure out exactally what Lit. dosen't like about my story but they're down to five days for a rejection LOL
But I'll get it eventually, hopefully

I've use an "Ohhhhh" or "Ahhhh" or "Ooooo" before...

I'd avoid the extended:

"AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHOHMYGODI'MCUMMINGOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!"



usually I describe orgasms in terms of sensation... the pulse, the heat, the flush, the waves of pleasure... toes curling, eyes closing, head going back, arching, panting, gasping, all that good stuff...

and it varies from story to story. If it's a more poetic kind if story, I'll make the orgasms more like poetry... if it's sweet, the orgasms are usually lighter, sweeter... if it's a hotter story, sometimes I'll throw in the dirty talk at the end... pushing them over the edge...

 

[Zeb_Carter]

I second Selena, my first story had a lot of the long drawn out Ah's, Oh's and Uh's. Since I have writen to express those in terms of the POV Character. What he/she see's, feel's as the event happens. Dialog is kept to the expression of the participants in real words.

 

[AchtungNight]

I usually keep them quick and sharp and let the reader fill in the blanks. That, and I do a lot of buildup. Sometimes I get pretty intense. Best of luck.

 

[Darkniciad]

I've learned to keep the vocalizations minimalized, and to only use them as an added punch to something really intense. I also don't extend any long vocalization beyond four or five letters. It's enough to get the point across usually, and doesn't jar the eyes quite so much as "Ooooooh!", or "Yessssss!" I either describe the drawn out nature of a word, or cut them down to "Oooh! Yesss!"

 

[rgraham666]

I usually keep it pretty simple. And like others, I describe all the other stuff going on.

For example:

Corrine's eyes goggle, her pupils dilate. "Cuh...cuh..." and she shrieks again.

Her channel clamps itself tight on me, her hips pump wildly. She twists and humps, completely lost in her orgasm. Her body freezes for a long moment, her legs hold me tight. A repetitive "Uh!" bursts from her lungs. And she collapses back into the chair.

So much goes on other than noise, ya know?