Lit Stories with Great Dialogue?

[3113]

What stories have you read on Lit that had particularly great dialogue? Natural, sexy, punchy, distinct, etc. All that good stuff good dialogue should have.

I'm doing a little research for someone on what makes for good erotic dialogue.

 

[ABSTRUSE]

Bumping because I love good dialogue.

 

[Salvor-Hardon]

I absolute love the dialogue in Chapter one of Abs,s "Death of a Thumb" But i am biased

 

[English Lady]

Anything by Joe Wordsworth but especially Being Vocal

Really real and hot Dialogue in that one

 

[ABSTRUSE]

I absolute love the dialogue in Chapter one of Abs,s "Death of a Thumb" But i am biased

PMSL!!!

 

[angela146]

[Shameless Plug]One example would be Prelude [/shameless plug]

 

[Guest]

.....

 

[kendo1]

Mm.

Mine.

 

[AchtungNight]

I try to put good dialogue in my stories. It doesn't always work, but I like to think I succeed. Plug done.

Other Lit authors who have done it well IMO include Aurora Black, Colleen Thomas, taleserotic, Anne240, Sabledrake, and Jennaxx.

 

[impressive]

What stories have you read on Lit that had particularly great dialogue? Natural, sexy, punchy, distinct, etc. All that good stuff good dialogue should have.

I'm doing a little research for someone on what makes for good erotic dialogue.

I wouldn't call them "great" ... but they're certainly "fun" ::

Be-Musing (F/F)

A-Musement (M/F)

Muse-ical Chair (F/M/F)

Each is all dialogue & no tags.

 

[elsol]

*burp*

I do dialogue good... or at least I haven't had any complaints and I use a LOT of dialogue.

Ever try to do dialogue between 6 people at a desk and make sure the reader can track who is saying what to whom and when.... JEEEZZZZ! That's a fucking pain in the ass.

I also like to use Impact Characters as a way to tell the reader something that's it is fairly obvious is not possible to show without guaranteeing a majority of readers are going to miss the boat.


Sincerely,
ElSol

 

[Stella_Omega]

Jessamine and Mad Moll both achieve (I flatter myself) natural dialogue in rather unnatural settings.
Of course, The Baroness's Boy has NEVER been commended for dialogue... But we can't win 'em all

I think dialogue is one of my main talents- Now if only I could do as well with plot arcs

 

[hyulhyulhyul]

What stories have you read on Lit that had particularly great dialogue? Natural, sexy, punchy, distinct, etc. All that good stuff good dialogue should have.

I'm doing a little research for someone on what makes for good erotic dialogue.

Most of my stories have a lot of dialog, especially "We Have Your Daughter". Most of the favorable comments about it made reference to the entertaining dialog.

 

[S-Des]

I'd say Longhorn_07 is probably my favorite here. He is obsessive about researching his characters and their dialogue is often tinged with humor, which I feel is important. Seperate Lives was my favorite story of his. HDK is another author I like.

Like everyone else, I strive to make the dialogue between my characters as interesting as I can. I try to use humor and a lot of drama to make people feel the character's emotions. How well I do it is something only the readers can say.

 

[Selena_Kitt]

Dr_Mabeuse from Gender Issues:

I laughed again. She was doing things with that cigar that made thinking difficult, and she knew it.

"Sounds like you've learned our secrets," I said." But wait till you try and get someone to go home with you. That's the hard part."

She put her head back and blew another stream of smoke at the ceiling. She had a dancer's neck, and the grace to go with it, and I wondered if Ilene had been right about her working behind the curtain. She obviously loved the spotlight. "That shouldn't be a problem. The girls are crazy for me."

"And is that what you want?"

"It's a possibility." She tilted her head and looked at me as the lights from the disco ball streamed over her mask. "Unless something better comes along."

She was playing with me but I didn't mind it from her. Not a bit.

"Pardon me for prying," I said. "But are you gay? I mean, it would be good to know before I really get involved."

"Oh? Are you planning on getting involved?" Another smile, another slow, plume of smoke swirling in the air like cream in black coffee. "A gentleman never tells," she said, closing those long lashes in false modesty.

I laughed again. She was exquisite. "My name's David McFedder."

"Sam," she said. She didn't put out her hand.

"Short for...?"

 

[Selena_Kitt]

KBate from Fast Horses

Once seated Sarah asked, "How do you know everyone?"

"Steeplechasing is a small world, everyone knows everyone," Kate evaded.

The waiter arrived, "Can I get you something to drink."

"Iced Tea for me," Kate said.

"Ice water with a slice of lemon," said Sarah.

Kate laughed, "You're a cheap date."

"Oh, is this a date?" Sarah asked with a hint of a smile on her face.

"Would you like it to be a date?" Kate was quick to dodge.

"Answer the question, Kate. Is it a date?"

"If I say yes, will you be mad? Will you leave?"

"I'm not saying until you answer. You brought it up."

The waiter returned with their drinks, placed them on the table and asked, "Are you ready to order ladies?"

Kate, looking directly in Sarah's eyes, said, "I will have the linguini with lobster, and so will she, side salads, vinaigrette dressing and bring plenty of bread."

Sarah smiled, "Is that your answer?"

"Part of it," she looked at the waiter and he shrank away to place the order. "When I kissed you earlier, you didn't run."

"I'm not saying anything until you answer the question." Sarah persisted.

"What if I don't answer?"

"I could leave."

"You left your car in Glyndon," Kate laughed.

"I can walk."

"It's thirty miles."

"I can flash leg and get a ride."

"Ha."

"Ha indeed, are you going to answer?"

"You won't be mad?"

"I can't say."

"I think you are the prettiest person I have ever seen," Kate temporised, "I would love to know you better."

"So, is this our first date?" Sarah pressed.
"First? If I say yes, does that mean we'll have more?"

"Have you answered my question yet? I'm lost."

"Yes. It is a date. I considered it a date from the minute I asked if you wanted to see my horse," Kate said, a little too loud. Several of the other patrons turned to look, but quickly turned back around upon learning that Kate had made the outburst.

"I knew it when I saw you staring at me in the paddock."

"And you still came with me?"

"Gods, woman, you couldn't have been more obvious. I was curious."

Kate sighed and said, "Now about that kiss, did you like it?"

 

[Selena_Kitt]

From The Adventures of Nebel and Tolk by Penelope Street:

Tollkühn's eyes wandered from the other elf, down to the package, and back to the other elf. "I suppose you're right. There's nothing to do but take it to the old lady." He paused to sigh. "Then there's gonna be a big investigation and someone's gonna get sent to Tahiti for it. You watch."

"But Anne will have her present."

"Yeah," Tollkühn began with a sigh. He reached down and picked up the box. "You're right. Let's go."

"Wait," Nebelhaft said. "If we deliver it, no one will get in trouble with the big guy and then no one will be mad at me for finding it."

"And how do you propose we get to Texas, wherever that is?"

"A reindeer, of course."

"Hello? They're all out just now."

"Not all," Nebelhaft insisted. "The reserves are still here."

"Oh yeah. I'm sure one of them will risk his chance to be on a team to help us take one gift to one spoiled brat!"

"What about one of the old ones with nothing to lose?"

"Old brats?"

"No," Nebelhaft said. "Old reindeer."

"There's a reason they have nothing to lose; they can't fly anymore!"

"Some can; they just can't pull a sleigh. But we're just two elves and one present. Surely one of them can carry us."

"Oh, so now we're going to bring someone else into the plot?"

"We have to!" Nebelhaft said. "We'll be back in a couple hours, way ahead of the teams. No one will miss us."

Tollkühn closed his eyes and shook his head. "We're both going to end up in Tahiti for this. You watch."

 

[quintessential]

Anything by Joe Wordsworth but especially Being Vocal

Really real and hot Dialogue in that one

Thank you for pointing out this author. This story was not only erotic but wonderfully written as well. I've not discovered another favorite author.

 

[3113]

Thank you all for your suggestions so far! Thank you, especially, Selena, for taking the time to post whole sections of dialogue! That was above and beyond the call of duty.

 

[Selena_Kitt]

Thank you all for your suggestions so far! Thank you, especially, Selena, for taking the time to post whole sections of dialogue! That was above and beyond the call of duty.

the stories speak for themselves, don'tcha think?

 

[3113]

I'd say Longhorn_07 is probably my favorite here. He is obsessive about researching his characters and their dialogue is often tinged with humor, which I feel is important. Seperate Lives was my favorite story of his.

S-Des! I couldn't find either Longhorn_07 or the story. Could you give a link?