HeyYoureThatGuy
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So, I'm almost to the point of ready for an editor of my Summer Lovin' entry. But during this last read-through, I came across a line that I find amusing, but it doesn't fit the tone.
Two couples in hearing distance of each other are having sex, and they start to try and outperform the other. I was struggling to find a way to sex competing sex sounds, and my first place holder for it was:
The sound of dueling bajangos drove her over the edge.
Funny, but breaks the flow.
What's a line that pained you to remove from a story/piece of writing?
Two couples in hearing distance of each other are having sex, and they start to try and outperform the other. I was struggling to find a way to sex competing sex sounds, and my first place holder for it was:
The sound of dueling bajangos drove her over the edge.
Funny, but breaks the flow.
What's a line that pained you to remove from a story/piece of writing?