Lilith’s Embrace

[Ceruledge]

This is an idea for an Erotic Horror/Mind Control story that was partially inspired by Duskmourn: House of Horror and Marvel Midnight Sons. I also took inspiration from Nadia Nightside’s stories. Tell me what you think.

Blurb​

Sad and alone while suffering depression, a lonely young man accidentally releases an ancient demonic being imprisoned in his house’s basement long ago. Known as Lilith, the dark temptress and mother of all demons, she is a being of immense evil and absolute beauty, who was feared in ancient times for her ability to corrupt and enslave anyone she encountered. Despite being a malicious entity, Lilith has a hidden softness she’s never shown to anyone, at least until she’s freed by the man living above her prison. She falls deeply in love with this fragile human, whose innocence and loneliness awakens a dormant desire within her. Consumed by forbidden love, she begins twisting Earth into a nubile paradise for them alone. To secure their bond, Lilith hides her true nature and the extent of her dark plans out of fear that that that her true demonic self will drive him away. Out of devotion and affection for her new “husband,” she begins transforming every woman on Earth into bewitching succubi; sultry, dangerous servants wholly devoted to worshiping their new lord and obeying his every desire.

Worldbuilding​

• The Fallen are once ordinary humans that have become enthralled and corrupted by Lilith’s dark power. Their minds are twisted into unwavering devotion—not only to Lilith but also to her new “husband,” whom they reverently call “Daddy.” Transformed into formidable demonic beings, they bear demonic enhancements and glowing irises that betray their corrupted nature. Each Fallen’s powers and traits are uniquely shaped by their former selves, reflecting their original strengths and personalities, though amplified and filtered through Lilith’s corrupting influence.

Author’s Notes​

• All of this may be subject to changes and edits in the future as I flesh out this idea more.

 

[EliseHarper]

I love the idea. I'm about 4000 words into a story about Lilith, first wife of Adam, and it takes place in modern time. "Duskmourn: House of Horror and Marvel Midnight Sons", are these graphic novels?

 

[Ceruledge]

I love the idea. I'm about 4000 words into a story about Lilith, first wife of Adam, and it takes place in modern time. "Duskmourn: House of Horror and Marvel Midnight Sons", are these graphic novels?

Midnight Sons is a video game, and Duskmourn: House of Horror is from Magic: The Gathering, which is a card game.

 

[Baztrachian]

Sad and alone while suffering from depression, a lonely young man accidentally releases an ancient demonic being that was imprisoned in the attic of his house long ago. Known as Lilith, the dark temptress and mother of all demons, she is a being of immense evil and absolute beauty, who was feared in ancient times for her ability to corrupt and enslave anyone she encountered. Despite being an immensely malicious entity, Lilith has a hidden tenderness she’s never shown towards anyone, at least until she’s freed by the man that lives below her prison. She falls in deep genuine love with this fragile human, whose innocence and loneliness awakens a dormant desire within her. Consumed by this forbidden love, she begins to twist the world into a twisted paradise for him alone. To secure their bond, Lilith hides her true nature and the extent of her dark plans out of fear that that that her true demonic self would drive him away. Out of devotion and affection for her new “husband,” she transforms every woman on Earth into bewitching succubi-sultry, dangerous servants wholly devoted to worshiping their new lord and obeying his every desire.

My spin on this would be more like:

A young man whose equally young bride has tragically passed away abides his time in the old English manor house the young couple had just bought. He consoles himself by performing a meticulous restoration of what had once been a grand home.

His work eventually leads him to the attic. The attic had once been a playroom for young children and he decides to restore it to its former glory. In the course of his work he finds a small, star-like symbol made of gold and inlaid on a portion of the wood floor that had been covered with old carpeting. He carefully removes it and feels an odd mix of cold and heat briefly pervade the room.

Taking the star downstairs to work on it he closes the door to the playroom.

After he leaves Lilith appears. Sealed into the floor of the attic centuries before and held prisoner by the golden star she is now free.

Her hatred of men seethes through her being and she immediately focuses on the young man who freed her. Her malevolence seeks him out and then she finds herself suddenly rebuffed by his grief for his lost love.

Lilith is distressed that she is powerless to inflict any further hurt on the young man. Even a painful death would be a welcome relief to him.

She reels because for the first time in her eons of existence she feels both pity and loss. She pities the man and she feels the emptiness in his soul from the loss of his beloved wife.

Lilith envies the dead woman the love this man feels for her.

She hesitates for a moment and then uses her magical powers to take form.

The young man is downstairs examining the star when he hears light footsteps on the stairs. He goes to the stairway and looking up he sees his dead wife returned to him! His heart swells! How can this be?

Unable to lie to him Lilith speaks, "I am not your beloved. I am in her form. I am yours if you wish it."

Years go by as this new couple enjoy life. In her human form Lilith gives the young man children. She feels the love he felt for his dead wife and the love of this man changes her heart.

The young man is now an older man and his young children are older. His mind goes back to the playroom that he needs to finish.

One day he takes the meticulously restored golden star and he places it back where he had found it.

He hears Lilith scream as she is ripped from her human form and locked back into the prison he has mistakenly resealed.

Finis.

 

[Ceruledge]

My spin on this would be more like:

A young man whose equally young bride has tragically passed away abides his time in the old English manor house the young couple had just bought. He consoles himself by performing a meticulous restoration of what had once been a grand home.

His work eventually leads him to the attic. The attic had once been a playroom for young children and he decides to restore it to its former glory. In the course of his work he finds a small, star-like symbol made of gold and inlaid on a portion of the wood floor that had been covered with old carpeting. He carefully removes it and feels an odd mix of cold and heat briefly pervade the room.

Taking the star downstairs to work on it he closes the door to the playroom.

After he leaves Lilith appears. Sealed into the floor of the attic centuries before and held prisoner by the golden star she is now free.

Her hatred of men seethes through her being and she immediately focuses on the young man who freed her. Her malevolence seeks him out and then she finds herself suddenly rebuffed by his grief for his lost love.

Lilith is distressed that she is powerless to inflict any further hurt on the young man. Even a painful death would be a welcome relief to him.

She reels because for the first time in her eons of existence she feels both pity and loss. She pities the man and she feels the emptiness in his soul from the loss of his beloved wife.

Lilith envies the dead woman the love this man feels for her.

She hesitates for a moment and then uses her magical powers to take form.

The young man is downstairs examining the star when he hears light footsteps on the stairs. He goes to the stairway and looking up he sees his dead wife returned to him! His heart swells! How can this be?

Unable to lie to him Lilith speaks, "I am not your beloved. I am in her form. I am yours if you wish it."

Years go by as this new couple enjoy life. In her human form Lilith gives the young man children. She feels the love he felt for his dead wife and the love of this man changes her heart.

The young man is now an older man and his young children are older. His mind goes back to the playroom that he needs to finish.

One day he takes the meticulously restored golden star and he places it back where he had found it.

He hears Lilith scream as she is ripped from her human form and locked back into the prison he has mistakenly resealed.

Finis.

I find this a little too tragic, no offense. It’s a good idea though. The reason a classify this as Erotic Horror and not just Mind Control because the story would focused the the evil acts Lilith would commit in the name of her new lover and the fearful perspectives of the survivors in the new world that Lilith is creating for her husband and herself.

 

[AlinaX]

I sense a dangerous lack of respect for the dark goddess. Do not summon Lilith and have her fall casually in love. She has little but contempt for the vanity of men.

 

[Ceruledge]

I sense a dangerous lack of respect for the dark goddess. Do not summon Lilith and have her fall casually in love. She has little but contempt for the vanity of men.

It’s just a story.

 

[AlinaX]

Is it?

 

[Husky_Embrace]

This is an idea for an Erotic Horror/Mind Control story that was partially inspired by Duskmourn: House of Horror and Marvel Midnight Sons. Tell me what you think.

Blurb​

Sad and alone while suffering from depression, a lonely young man accidentally releases an ancient demonic being that was imprisoned in the attic of his house long ago. Known as Lilith, the dark temptress and mother of all demons, she is a being of immense evil and absolute beauty, who was feared in ancient times for her ability to corrupt and enslave anyone she encountered. Despite being an immensely malicious entity, Lilith has a hidden tenderness she’s never shown towards anyone, at least until she’s freed by the man that lives below her prison. She falls in deep genuine love with this fragile human, whose innocence and loneliness awakens a dormant desire within her. Consumed by this forbidden love, she begins to twist the world into a twisted paradise for them alone. To secure their bond, Lilith hides her true nature and the extent of her dark plans out of fear that that that her true demonic self will drive him away. Out of devotion and affection for her new “husband,” she begins transforming every woman on Earth into bewitching succubi; sultry, dangerous servants wholly devoted to worshiping their new lord and obeying his every desire.

Worldbuilding​

• The Fallen are once ordinary humans that have become enthralled and corrupted by Lilith’s dark power. Their minds are twisted into unwavering devotion—not only to Lilith but also to her new “husband,” whom they reverently call “Daddy.” Transformed into formidable demonic beings, they bear demonic enhancements and glowing irises that betray their corrupted nature. Each Fallen’s powers and traits are uniquely shaped by their former selves, reflecting their original strengths and personalities, though amplified and filtered through Lilith’s corrupting influence.

I feel the motivation at the start is thin. I would change it not to involve chance.

The young man in a depression is seeking a way out. I can tell you, if you offer someone to solve their depression the next day, they only require them to cut their own arm off, nearly everyone with a depression would take it. People with a depression can do extreme things, if they can find the motivation to get out of bed in the morning.

The guy considers it is less bad to pursue a demon to solve their depression than just staying as is. He's finally are able to summon Lilith after long research and gathering mystical 'stuff'.

Lilith can't stay forever on her own, yet knows the guy can be manipulated to keep her on this plane of existence. As the guy comes out of his depression he finds to have power. This is used to force a mutual respect, and later affection besides the physical touch that is already received.

I love the idea. I'm about 4000 words into a story about Lilith, first wife of Adam, and it takes place in modern time. "Duskmourn: House of Horror and Marvel Midnight Sons", are these graphic novels?

Funnily enough, so am I. It has been dormant for over a month now, as the phone was wiped and the data is in a backup hard drive that I haven't yet put back in the new phone.

Even so I expected Lilith to be exceedingly rare to be written about, and not a "here's 3 people writing about it."

Mine is much more simple. Summoning demons is a practice not done for many decades thanks to superstition and simply because they're demons. The demons are ridgid in their codes, as no one wants an offer for power if it can't be trusted. One man wants to prove summoning demons can be safe and mutually beneficial, as long as you accept the exchange. They accidentally summon Lilith, who's succubus powers stem from intimate physical interactions. Though this complicates the issue, theres more to the motivations of the guy than initially appears. Can he outwit the demon from the dawn of time?